The Shadow

Then she looked at me. 

I thought that she was looking at me

for the first time. 

But then, when she turned around 

behind the lamp and 

I kept feeling her slippery and oily look

in back of me, over my shoulder,

I understood that it was I 

who was looking at her for the first time.

I saw her walk over to the dressing table.

I watched her appear in the circular glass 

of the mirror looking at me now 

at the end of a back and forth 

of mathematical light.

I watched her keep on looking at me 

with her great hot-coal eyes: looking at me

I saw her powder her nose. When she finished, 

stood up again, and walked 

over to the lamp once more, 

saying: "I'm afraid that someone is dreaming 

about this room and revealing my secrets."

Reviews

[Ruth]

This is awe inspiring!
I read this twice to gain perspective on it and I have to say, I am astonished at the depth of imagery here!
A brilliant poem love, the whole piece reads like a scene...vivid in my head...almost concave, if that makes sense!
Great work love xoxo

[Raven Starhawk]

You feature strength in words that astound as well as play with the senses and imagination. I am in a place of sublime inspiration.

[Amila Jay]

Sounded like the yellow wallpaper, very different and a really good write:)

[Mary Fioratti]

This poem is so different...and so touching. A scene that you can imagine as real - as - the reader is living this moment... Such intensity!
*Mary*

[☮Alpenglow]

Gorgeous piece. You effectively paint a vivid portrayal of your scene, to overall create a piece of significant beauty. Once again, your use of imagery is impeccable. Lovely work!

[Thea]

Yay! A very impressive writing...You are very creative!
I find this really interesting...Excellent work!
:)))

[WindSong]

It reads like a script in a play. This is a very theatrical poem with lucid imagery as well as bordering on the edge of the mcacabre. A great poem which I shall read again!

[KAREN]

Nice work! Tells an awesome story!

[bookworm]

"I kept feeling her slippery and oily look in back of me, over my shoulder"...very unique phrasing....

Interesting concept...clever insights...nice work.