Pounding

I've been doing a lot of work with the dark/nursery rhymes lately and will be continuing to do so, but for today at least I'll be doing something different, so as not to get predictable!

The twinkle turned sparkle in his eyes,

The feelings grew and eased my pain,

The excitement of the heart is filling,

The love comes running like rain.

He takes my hand as soft as spring,

He holds me tight to vice my soul,

He lays me down to grab our pleasure,

He loves a feeling never taking its toll.

I shudder to think of time away from him,

I plead with life to spare time for us two,

I lack the discipline to mature and say no,

I hope for a glance not much just a few.

We settle and care for a time stretched long,

We love and love and love to the end,

We know the time on earth is short,

We meet our feelings as always on lend.

Author's Note

Not my usual type of poetry at all, but I feel i need to show everyone that I'm not a one trick pony, thoughts?

Reviews

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

The pounding of the heart my friend.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

loved this one too every poem that I read of yours just keeps getting better Im a fan

[Searching 4 Serenity]

You did a good job for something out of your usual style

[Fairytale]

Sounds like playful love. I like the rhyming. Your poem reminds me of spring time.

[WynterPhoenix]

Beautiful write. You're a very talented individual.

[quinfinn]

truly, i think i like this best of all your poems i've read so far. personal and honest to a fault... good job.

[Valentine]

It is good to not be set on just one type of writing..Variety is the spice of life and there are so many things we see each day to inspire us to do something a bit different..Nice one..Kathie

[CagedBIRDsings]

A bit different from what you usually write but I really enjoyed it. It had a nice flow and had a good choice of words.
"I shudder to think of time away from him,
I plead with life to spare time for us two,
I lack the discipline to mature and say no,
I hope for a glance not much just a few."
This poem contains the ache of a missing lover, the joy of being together, and the excitement of return and forever. Great job! Very different, but great job anyway. :)

[Ashley]

This has a really good flow and a steady rhythm. There are a lot of good strong words in this. Overall it's lovely.

[E.Gleaves]

This has a nice rhythm and your word choice was good as usual.