Divorce

written for the 10/40

Pitch your deceitful dagger into the throat of this marriage

Our vows nothing more than scarped erosion to you

Dreams of our destiny landed in the bog of lamentations

Breaking waves of fat sorrow alphabet through my unpolished

Turmoiled mind

 

Author's Note

Dedicated to the very fresh memory of my parent's 25 year marriage severed by my father's decisions.....


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Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

WOW! Intense, true raw emotion!

[fireblossom]

Despair pain anger frustration

well portrayed and well written

[Juan]

Thank you for putting my sentiments into the words that I could not...it's kind of like a breath of air after being underwater for a while.

[hiralarious]

Wow.
That's intense. Love the emotion, Love the poem. Great piece.

[Charles D. Moorer]

Anger is a white hot sword that cuts both ways. I understand how you feel. I wonder if you understand how your father felt. What demons drove him? What does anger/hatred do to you?

Nicely done, though.

[Scott Lynn]

Yikes.....the anger and raw intensity are prevalent in this. It must have struck you hard. I'm sorry to hear about your parents marriage. But emotions are our guiding forces, and so rarely can we express ourselves eloquently, even if it's a bit flustered. A good work.

[Frank Terino]

Very powerful honest raw, cutting and draws out turmoil and passion and what it is to feel emotion in words and understanding, depthfully sculpted and crafty, i'm sure many can relate to see, great job.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

brutal raw intensity...

[Amanda]

I am very sorry, you must feel anger and pain.

This is truly showing your feelings

[Bill Grimes Jr.]

I know this demon well I'm afraid.......your words describe the pain and disgust of divorce beautifully....Well done Laura!

Bill :-)