every day

Every

day

I

come

home

hopeful

then

find

his

toothbrush

is

still

here

Reviews

[ShameemAkhtar]

HAhaha...

:) So evocative.

I enjoyed it. Just a thought though. At this rate you will grow paranoid.. :)

How you you call fear of toothbrush :)

[Emily B]

oh, oh

what a large poem

[Lorraine]

I like it. The thought is brilliant and was expressed in such a creative way. You've told a story in a few words and without directly telling it. You've achieved the saying "show not tell". Amazing write.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Zatoichi]

That's a lot of emotion packed into 17 syllables- great haiku.

On second reading I find it cynically beautiful.

[DownTheDrain]

I agree with Persephoneia

[Samuel Dickens]

I guess that toothbrush should take a hike, along with its owner. You say a lot with a little. Maybe it's my odd sense of humor, but it made me snicker a little.

[Miss Coral]

Great piece.
Simple, but conveys SO much.