Unexpected New Year's night

An action comedy short story that will mix your feelings about it.

It all happened that night, When we were preparing to welcome the New Year. 2 more minutes. People were already starting the fireworks and others weren't sober anymore. I was waiting patiently. Then... one more minute. Time was passing really slow as I was looking only at the clock. 10 more seconds. 9... 8... 7... 6... 5... 4... 3... 2... 1... then the alarm started.

Helicopters were roaming the sky with red beams roaring. The Russians were attacking us, right then. It was already a new year. That year was Russia's.

Our soldiers tried to fight back, but it was cold and snowy, and that was perfect just for the Russian soldiers. How could we defend against them? Nobody prepared us for that. We were not going to make it. I saw one breaking the metallic doors, and more entering and spraying garlic poison all over the place. Two of us were down, as they were vampires. But I love garlic. I stood up and punched one in the chest, as it was their weak point. That man totally collapsed, and the others took a french leave. They made a mistake to wake me. By now they still hope they hadn't angered me.

Author's Note

don't take it seriously

Reviews

[Brooklyn]

I like your story, but the reader doesn't get a sense of what the person narrating is experiencing. Ex: "The Russian's were attacking us, the night air cold and stale, my hands clammy and rigid. I looked up at the screeching sounds across the sky, palpitating the rhythms of my heart to an...." I think you need to work on building expressing your emotions through your characters, its fun you might like building your characters that way :)

[Lydia...]

Thank you, I really didn't think about that. It would make the character more of a person than of a monster among vampires XD

[Brooklyn]

It's just that you need to show more then tell, that's one of my biggest struggles as well, I edit for days on just one scene.