Sonnet IV

Another sonnet that seems ready for reviews

Well, hello! Greetings! I come from afar,

With pale withered limbs and quivering jowls,

I cast my lot with you to find a good bar,

That we can get drunk and sleep through the howls.

 

Greetings indeed, contact is established.

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To start over simply answer agree.

 

This critter tain’t man, get my musket, Bill

I’ll blow off his noggin’ and stick swords in his bottom.

But wait, ‘tis shiny, not gold but with skill

Could fetch a fair price, come ‘round this autumn.

 

Concept acknowledged. Don’t try to steal this

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Author's Note

I particularly hate the fourth line. Any suggestions to fix this would be appreciated. Maybe 2 and 4 should be changed. And also 3, 7, and 9-13. Maybe it's not ready for review, but review it anyway!