The U.N.F.O.R.G.I.V.E.N

The U.N.F.O.R.G.I.V.E.N

A Poem by Undying Glory
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An acrostic poem inspired by Metallica's song "The Unforgiven", about a man who never took risks in life and ended up regretting it.

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 The U.N.F.O.R.G.I.V.E.N

 

Unwilling to risk anything, now look at what I’ve become,

Now everything for me has just come and gone

Forever allowing the world to decide my fate,

Onto the ground I fall, and now it’s all too late.

Realized I couldn’t please them all, no matter what I do,

Gave my all for this, but just couldn’t see it through.

I’m accepting my fate, nothing else can be done,

Vanquished and bitter, insane I’ve become.

End of my story now, I truly am unforgiven,

Now I die in all regret, in the sadness I kept hidden. 


© 2011 Undying Glory



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Astounding , love the way you've constucted this marvellous piece of poetry.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Scary, true, and sent shivers down my spine. I suppose this piece is really special because in some way everyone can relate to it. The notion of pleasing everyone, so Utopian, and obviously so unattainable, yet we all strive towards it, such is our fate and inner build. In the end unforgiven by all.. tragically true. As always, your writing assaults the reader and makes her sit up straight and listen to what you're saying. fantastic piece.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I am shocked at this piece of writing, how you were able to frame regrets in life in ten lines. This just proves you are truly gifted in the way you communicate to your audeince. I especially loved the way you summed up all your regrets and hidden feelings, you created an aura of mystery which the reader is compelled to find out more on. My favourite line has to be "Forever allowing the world to decide my fate" because it is reminiscent, I am able to connect and see into your speakers past. Not just that, it creates suspense because I want to find out more. anyway overall stunning write! x

Posted 8 Years Ago


fantastic piece:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Nice new style!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Very powerful. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


A spectacular piece indeed. A poem with strong emotions. Very well written.

Posted 8 Years Ago


very realistic, and well written. acrostic poems are becoming rare nowadays, so its good to see one this powerful

Posted 8 Years Ago


nice work...very well written and thought out...

Posted 8 Years Ago


Good Job. Poems like these are often hard to do well. But I think you pulled it off, especially with rhyme.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Undying Glory
Undying Glory

Singapore, Singapore



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The average guy you'd meet on the street, only with a hidden streak. Or several, for that matter. 24 year old, 4th year medical student, studying in Dundee, Scotland. Never underestimate the pow.. more..

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