To those whom I hate (The Raven Prince)

I wrote this poem in school, and I love it. this poem is dedicated to all the people who think they can get away with hurting others.

You think you lounge in

Ivory towers

Twisting into the Heavens.

Riches of plenty

Known to man,

Surround you in forceful adoration.

Victory be won

By blackest of souls.

You are a deceiving king

On a chipped throne of marble.

You sneer down to the people below

Who you've enslaved,

hearts and mind.

 

Knight; O light!

Save me from the Raven Prince!

 

You bestow the most wicked gifts

To those who fear you.

And those who hate you,

You fear.

By the Almighty Prince of Peace,

Will you finally fall.

 

Fall into the depths

Of the most darkest parts

of HELL

Author's Note

please point out flaws and things I could do to improve! feel free to criticize!

Reviews

[Jack...]

Dragonheart, this is so very cool and your message hits home. These who would judge and scorn, sitting in their thrones looking down on others, as if they are the high and mighty be damned. Each and every one of them. Where is the compassion that is supposed to come with humanity, the love, the forgiveness...left beyond these walls where those who need them can not see.

[Justsimplyjulia]

thank you so much for stopping by Jack, really appreciate it. This is one of my favorite poems that I have written!
:)

[Jack...]

You are welcome, it was my pleasure.

[Frieda P]

Well, Dragon this is one of the more elegant rants I've read. Love a 'chipped throne of marble' well said!

[Justsimplyjulia]

thank you so much!

[Frieda P]

Pleasure was mine, glad you felt better after penning this!

[Sami Khalil]

A lot of power and empowerment too in this powerful poem. Great...:).......................

[Justsimplyjulia]

thank you so much Sami!
:)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).................

[dreaming dame]

I have no flaws to point out so all I'm left with Is writing my adoration for your talent an skill. Each stanza an every emotion flows together so uniquely:)
This poem feels strong, ivory towers twisting into the heavens, wonderful job with description:) keep it up dragonheart:)

[Justsimplyjulia]

Thanx Dreaming Dame. Your comments mean a lot since I absolutely LOVE your work. Im glad you like my stuff!

[Sharon Kim]

I feel a lot of power in this poem. I really like the imagery in the first lines.

A couple of notes-. It should be on a chipped throne of marble. The other spelling changed the whole meaning.

Also I think the line- who you've enslaved their hearts and minds, would read better without the word their-who you've enslaved, hearts and minds.
Nice work! :). Sharon

[Justsimplyjulia]

Thank you! I would never have seen those errors!

[Sharon Kim]

You are most welcome!