A Glitch in the Skye

This is my longest novel to date, (6-14-2012) though not quite finished yet. I will be adding chapters as I write them.
Please note: You may see some strange symbol that looks like quotation marks, but are inappropriately placed. It's suppoed to be two hyphens, indicating someone's talking getting cut off, but it somehow got messed up during conversion. I apologize!
Ignoring that, however, I am very interested to hear feedback, but please be kind about it. I can handle constructive criticism, but there's no need to be blatantly rude about it. :) Thank you~