What It Means To Sink

What It Means To Sink

A Poem by ohsograceful
"

water fills everything

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Water seeps into everything.

I practice origami,

Folding myself smaller and smaller,

but I’m surrounded.

The thought of oxygen rips my chest open

and salt makes eyes useless.

sweaty palms and cruel fingers push me down.

I used to resist, but

with every panic filled movement

I sink further.

each wound from uncut nails

paints my cage red.

I have to stop the water,

To find the sun, and

evaporate my grave.


© 2017 ohsograceful



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I think this is really good. “I practice origami, folding myself smaller and smaller” was my favorite line. The wording throughout the whole poem reflects the theme of sinking, and “evaporate my grave” was a really interesting twist.
Glad to have read this!

Posted 2 Days Ago


If you are anything like me, writing is the most direct path to grave evaporation.
I really enjoy your work.

Posted 2 Months Ago


ohsograceful

2 Months Ago

Writing is definitely something I do for me, it's very cathartic. And thanks, it's always nice to fi.. read more
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One of the hardest parts of life is finding a version of ourselves that WE can love and then finding a happy place to live in with folk that love us warts and all. After that it is plain sailing all the way, well, it's easier.
Enjoyed your writing OSG

Posted 2 Months Ago


Oh, wow! This was amazing. The first few lines in felt like a swift punch to the gut, and overall, I relate to these feelings personally. Thanks for sharing this!

Posted 2 Months Ago


Wow! I love the last few lines... brilliant work!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ohsograceful

2 Months Ago

Thank you, it's one of my favorites :)
that was really great :) very powerful :) great job :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

powerful imagery in this piece

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such a sad place for the soul...to have nothing left but for the need to disappear....hope for the end! I practice origami,
Folding myself smaller and smaller, great line

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ohsograceful

2 Months Ago

Thanks :) I agree, there's hope for an end
Very nice imagery used, as said in a previous comment. I particularly like the like 'I practise origami. folding myself smaller and smaller'. It straight away gave me a figurative image of people folding in upon themselves, or even hiding their true selves within layers over their own exterior. Very nice read!

Posted 2 Months Ago


ohsograceful

2 Months Ago

thank you! The idea of folding in on yourself has always been very interesting to me
I really like this-the imagery.
I'm glad it gave hope at the end.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ohsograceful

2 Months Ago

thanks :) I like to think there's always a little hope at the end, even if it might be hiding

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Added on November 27, 2017
Last Updated on November 27, 2017
Tags: sink, depression, water, sun

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