The Way You Make Me Feel

Purely descriptive poem of how he makes me feel... I think. Haha.

The Way You Make Me Feel

 

Walking with my head held high,

Talking animatedly till I am bone dry.

But when I’m with you, I just try and try,

All that comes out - a frustrated, shy sigh.

 

Glares and stares, I can do them in a snap,

In my eyes, anyone feels like lost in a trap.

But when you look at me, it only takes a clap,

Averting my blue peepers under this white cap.

 

Jesting with me, I simply counterattacked,

Laughing so hard until my voice cracked.

But when it’s with you, I always get sidetracked

Cause you make it feel full - my urinary tract.

 

I used to hate the feeling of being in my school,

I just wished to sit whole day on my piano stool.

But when there were you, I banished this ground rule.

For all I want is to look at you and drool like a fool.

 

Before there were you, I retire early at night.

I didn’t have thoughts of turning feelings to a write.

But when you came along, everything just felt right,

Every piece of my mind, you haunt it like a mosquito bite.

 

Author's Note

Totally random. I just described how he makes me feel, but with rhymes! HAHA. Well okay, I don't drool. =)) Enjoy and tell me what you think about it.

Awarded 'Good Love Poem ♥' in the Love Poems Contest.

Reviews

[tk]

such a sweet, innocent feel in this piece! :)
very funny and it made me remember those high school days. i used to feel like this before.. haha!
"Cause you make it feel full - my urinary tract."
"For all I want is to look at you and drool like a fool."
totally hilarious. and the rhyming scheme is awesome.
such a noteworthy write by a notable writer. keep it up.
thanks for sharing!

[EMF]

Ah. Teenage love. And thirties love and sixties love. It's all the same. When you meet someone and begin to fall we all feel like this. You have summed up a universal feeling perfectly. Superb job, and nicely handled.

[EylonBear]

lol you don't drool but apparently he makes you want to pee? i like it it's cute. there were a couple lines that seem grammatically wrong though i'm not sure if that was on purpose or not >< good job.

[WritersSoul]

Aww, i remember i wrote classic love poems for theguy i actually fell head over heels for, everyone who has read my more beginner writes would know the trauma i had because of falling for the guy that made me get all dressy for after school, how he made me feel so great when he just smiled at me :)
I hope it all goes well :) Great poem and I loved the font btw :)
Beth :3

[Loney tunes]

still lacks depth but you quite good with rhymes. it seems to you that rhyming is the essence of poetry

[HeIsWe]

Totally Random:yes Did I love it: Yes

[Rylie]

I like it. It is very random but it still has a little feeling in it. Good job!