Murky Puddles

Murky Puddles

A Poem by PoetryEater
"

insecurities destroy us from the inside

"

Murky Puddles

she looks down in the murky water
she sees imperfection, i see someone's beautiful daughter

I ask society how this could be 
why does she feel like a rain drop in a sea

a shallow sea of competition and pride
we're all walking at the same pace, but shes not in stride

so unappreciated that she thinks shes unworthy
strong and beautiful she intimidates all, even me.

no one listens to her, she wipes away the rain
eyes leaking because her insecurities induce pain

It rains and her muddy puddle becomes clear
she can finally see herself here

she has overcome her self-doubt
then she hears inaudible whispers and begins to pout

her puddle becomes dirty, again.

© 2013 PoetryEater



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PoetryEater
look for positives (especially in yourself)

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This is really good. Bravo!

Posted 3 Years Ago


A remarkable poem that readers can easily connect to. It does seem like it possesses too much metaphorical imagery and not enough imagery to fit the emotion of the piece though. Still, an excellent one all the same.

Posted 4 Years Ago


A remarkable poem that readers can easily connect to. It does seem like it possesses too much metaphorical imagery and not enough imagery to fit the emotion of the piece though. Still, an excellent one all the same.

Posted 4 Years Ago


this is a great write, a real contender!

Posted 4 Years Ago


really subtle poem well done

Posted 4 Years Ago


An awe inspiring read, I think it should be required reading for teenage girls!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Stunningly beautiful poem. Word choice is perfectly executed. I really enjoyed this read.

Posted 4 Years Ago


i absolutely love the wording you've used here. really beautiful poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Your poetry is truly beautiful god bless you this poem has inspired my poems. Thank you!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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that's a beautiful poem I love it.

Posted 4 Years Ago



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