Pure and Young

A poem about the joy and innocence of youth PLZ READ

They look so young, so pure

Did I once look so white?

They don't know nor care now

The world outside the swings

In their eyes are mirrors

I can hear the angels sing

To be yet young again

To spread soft arms and fly

Envy I won't deny

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Erin Thomas]

One very very picky thing. To match the rhythm of the second to last line, try making it "envy that I won't deny". Otherwise, I love this!!! I love how you use white to personify the purity of youth. Great work! I love it!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I considered that but I felt that when I ended like that the poem seemed to me less final and incomplete

[Erin Thomas]

I see that. Good work!