Sea of Deception

Pain of a love lost in betrayal.

Lonely & inebriated, I think about you,
A tempest rages in my mind,
The ship of sanity totters with sails askew,
The land of hope, nowhere can I find.

Memories flooding my mind,
Wish I could drown in this stupor,
Amidst a raging sea, no place to hide,
A saving hand, none has to offer.

Adrift in this sea of loneliness,
Battered by the fury of the guide,
Staring into the depths of a whirling abyss,
To sink is the call of the mind.

Prolonged is this bottomless falling,
Hastened by the weight of rejection,
All resolve, in this pain seems to be failing,
Soul darkened by the blackness of deception.

Reviews

[Ally Monique]

Despite the lack of company out at sea, I've never felt alone. Memories of those I love are enough to keep me preoccupied. To me, the sea is a safe-haven, where I can escape the deception and corruption of the world. However, I have always loved the metaphor of the sea being a place to drown in loneliness & sadness, it fits well! :)
Rejection from those we love can bring us to dark places.

[Poetic Nuance]

The pain of a heart break can be overwhelming for some. So true your last sentence. Thank you for your comments. :)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

I like this poem. Very gloomy, but it is a.so relatable to those who have had a similar heartbreak.

Kaze~

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you. Glad you like it. :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome.

[Ama May Cooper]

Wow a truely heart breaking memory , the shattered hearts from rejection the lonliness in which the memories trickle in. This is so powerful so brutal ... to be deceived by those we love that bitter taste of lonliness that is left behind.

Loved it

[Poetic Nuance]

Than you for your comments. Glad you like it. :)

[Ian Gilmour]

The imagery in this poem is truly outstanding and I'm stymied by how, even after so many great novels poets can still create so much meaning with the ocean. This was very well done and I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you for commenting. Glad you like it. :)

[Alfred Kukitz]

Doom and gloom in poetic splendor. Nice work!

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you so much. :)

[Fenix Flight]

I love the image this paints in my head. Very well written. I love the anger that in this. thanks for sharing

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you for your comments. :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

A poignant tale of heartbreak.. liked the allegory... Ship raging against the gales and storm, hopes it emerges victorious.. liked your coining of phrases but you can avoid unneccessary repetition. Overall a nice write :) keep writing.

~Sophy

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you so much. Glad you liked the poem. :)

[priya]

Such a powerful poem..its intense, dark and soulful.. everything is so perfect..the picture adds charm to your poem. :)

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you so much. I am glad you like it. :)

[Saddam]

Memories flooding my mind,
Wish I could drown in this stupor,
Amidst a raging sea, no place to hide,
A saving hand, none has to offer.

A very beautiful write. As I imagine, many memories stucking in my mind and sinking me much deeper. Great your vocabolary. I enjoyed it.

[Poetic Nuance]

Thank you so much all of you for your wonderful comments. It is quite overwhelming. I am not used to so many comments. Most of my poems get 1 or maybe 2 comments. This is the first time that so many people have reviewed one of my poem. I am very happy. Thank you so much. :)