Life is the longest thing you'll do

Life is the longest thing you'll do

A Poem by LynLee

I do not know why

people say,

"Live life to the fullest,

every single day",

Even though

We all know,

It's going to end,

In a tragic way.

 

I do not know why people say,

"Life is to short,

so follow your heart,

and dream your dreams",

When people know that one day,

Our heart will be sunken into the ground,

withering with infested worms,

and that dreams will not always be achieved.

 

So I say,

"Live life the best you can,

because you will not be here forever.

Live life the way you want,

It's the longest thing you do.

And if it is cut short,

then thanks the gods you were even put on this earth,

because we will remember you,

even when we don't want to."

 

Live life the way you thought it should be,

And kiss the earth for letting you here.

Because someday,

you will become part of it.

© 2011 LynLee


Author's Note

LynLee
I hope you feel the emotion and if I spelt something wrong please tell me! thank you and critism won't hurt!!!!!!!

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Some minor errors. "Life is (too) short" and "then (thank) the gods you were..." This is such a beautiful and thoughtful piece. I hope those errors will be corrected to make this all the more wonderful. I totally love your positive perspective. It's uniquely yours and simply inspiring.

Keep Writing. ^___^

Posted 13 Years Ago


Tragic, but optimistic at the end. I really like this. Everyone seems to be in a bad situation at the moment...way to hang a light at the end of the tunnel.

"Life is to short" --'to' should be 'too'
"withering with infested worms" --'withering', I think, should be 'whithering' (or it doesn't matter)
"and that dreams will not always be acheived" --'acheived' should be 'achieved'
"then thanks the gods were even put on this earth" --'then thank the gods you were [or] we're put on this Earth'
:)


Posted 13 Years Ago


wow i did! this was totally awesome! nicely done once again!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Nice and You KNOW i cant spell either soooo... yeh

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is nice, A different way to look at things, and life in general.

Posted 14 Years Ago


i really liked this poem, life is a great topic to write about. Personally cant spell, so, i think you didnt spell anything wrong... haha

Posted 14 Years Ago


okay i dont know why the reviews dont show up


Posted 14 Years Ago



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Hola, me llamo LynLee. De donde es Earth. Me cumpleanos es Noviembre 24. Me gusta es escribir. Sorry had to practice my spanish somewhere. I'm LynLee. I'm fourteen and I am a writer. My best frien.. more..

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