The Pulse Stopped

Its something i wrote for a friend, when her father expired, its painful to let go someone.

The Pulse Stopped

The pulse stopped, so have I, 

I was supposed to move on, but how could I. 

Touch of your hand is still there, 

Every time I look back I find you here.

How can I forget the strength you gave me? 

How can I resist the pain your absence gives me?

It’s hard to forget the moments I walked holding your fingers all the time, 

It’s hard to stop crying thinking how much I miss you dad all the time.

My first day at school & you leaving me on the door, 

I still remember your smile saying don’t worry I will always be there to hold.

Whenever I lost, whenever I won, 

It was just you dad who made me to move on.

Last night I saw you in my dreams, 

I thought I lost you, but no you are still here, saying Hi to me.

Your last moments they still hurt,

But I know I have to smile,

Because somewhere I know you want me to smile, 

Today the pulse has stopped, so have I,

But telling you truth dad, I miss being on your side.

RAJ

 

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

very touching, moving write that shows the empathy that you feel for them.. Loss is such a difficult thing.. you feel like part of you is missing.. like part of you died that day... the shock of knowing that things will never be the same.. that you will never see them again.. the memories become your comfort and your curse as waves of emotion try to drown you in despair.. during those times, it was a blessing, I am sure, to have a friend like you.. very real, honest, beautiful piece...

[raj24]

Thanks April....you need people around you to support at those moments...unfortunately that friend was not in my country..i wrote it for when i got the news just to make her feel better..i am glad you liked it..:)

Raj

[Najam Us Saher]

Very heart touching. You express your emotions very well.

[raj24]

thanks Saher for the beautiful words, i am glad you liked it. thanks again

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome ☺

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

This has a lot of emotion in it, very hard and sad to lose someone, it is nice of you to write this for your friend.

Good Job

[raj24]

I am glad you liked it Jessica.. thanks for the wonderful words :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

You're welcome

[Ashira Macy]

This was a beautiful gift for your friend and very sad, but also touching. Sometimes all we need is for someone to reach out to us when we are in mourning. Well done, I am sure they were very thankful for this.

[raj24]

our presence is key at times ..although some pains are hard to heal but few nice words can give some relief to that tired mind..thanks for the wonderful review Ashira:)

Raj

[amrit]

every single word dipped in grief .. this is exactly what a person would feel .. RIP

[raj24]

Thanks Amrit.. i am glad you liked it..:)

Raj

[Sophy Freebirds]

The pain of letting someone go is heart wrenching and knowing we can never be with them again.Just an emptiness is left behind.You did a good work,writing for someone is the best gift a writer can give. :)

~Sophy

[raj24]

quite true..writing for sumone is best gift we can give..not everyone can do it so v r the lucky ones...i m glad u read it..:)

Raj

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you did a really nice job here of writing it from your friend's perspective...you so smoothly slipped into her feelings...
nicely done.

[raj24]

m glad u liked it...by sharing sumone's pain we can give them sume strength..may not heal it but can surely make them feel stronger..thanks for reading sir..:)

Raj

[Rachelle]

He would have been so proud of you undoubtedly.....

[raj24]

it was for my friend's father...n quite true the pain of losing ur parents is much bigger than anything else...Thanks for reading it Rachelle..:)

[Anahat]

Beautifully expressed.... I could feel the pain you wanted to express...
Well done!
-Love Anahat

[raj24]

shukriya, shukriya...:)

pain is the soul of heart...when we feel pain only than we realize how beautiful is love..

Raj

[Anahat]

Yes yes exctly...if we dont suffer pain..we wud not knw the importance of love..❤

[Marcovy Duwin]

Amazing. Valuing the memory of someone that you lost is what keep them alive.

[raj24]

well said, memories keep them alive in our heart and makes us strong with belief that they are around us always..thanks for liking it buddy..:)