Nightstorm

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Slow your storm
My wayward lover
That thunderous pounding
'tween your breasts

Our faces
Have drawn close
Your voice
has grown so sweet

When our mouths
Meet once again
And waves of sapphire
Kiss the sand strewn shore

Lightning strikes
The mountain peak
Midnight clouds
Swirl high o'erhead

Cradled in my arms
Your body glistens like the sea
Gazing in your eyes
They shimmer like the sun

Posideons breath
Rolls 'cross the waves
My lips acquaint themselves
With your seakissed body

Ease your storm
My eager lover
Still that thunder
'neath your chest

Reviews

[Mockingbird]

very visual imagery. i can smell the sea and the beach in my mind. perhaps his lover is angry and the passion comes out through thunder between her breasts.

[lrigD]

Beautifully written! It has the feel of an 'old' poem, from 19th century or before... I loved it =)

[Infinity♱]

Each stanza flow so beautifully together. And I love the metaphors too. Great write

[Holly]

Beautiful. It's wonderful. I loved it. Great job! :)

[deeps]

WOW! This caught my heart and eyes.
This is amazing. Amazing flow to it.
Very well written and powerful.