The Bear

The Bear

A Poem by Abigail Latoreno
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A short poem depicting a bear and a rose. A symbolism which mirrors my once high school sweetheart from what seemed like centuries ago.

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There once was a bear so grizzly and proud

 

A conqueror of land, animals shiver at his very sound

 

A brute to the others, a shadow among the trees

 

Kept order in the forest, bringing foes to their knees.

 


The bear had a weakness and this was true

 

A bud of rose that grew and grew

 

It was his own little flower, so timid and shy

 

He swore he'll never hurt it or cause it to cry.


 

The bear was happy with his little bud of rose

 

He was loving and gentle after all, it shows.

 

The flower grew steadily within his care.

 

With all it's dew and nectar for the world to share.


 

Yet a rose, though beautiful, was never without a thorn

 

Through millions of years never has a thorn-less rose been born.

 

The bear was ignorant of the pain a rose could bring

 

But it came to him like of water in a spring.


 

The bear pricked his gentle paw on the sharp end

 

A rush of pain, sorrow and betrayal it send

 

A rush of anger seeped into his vein

 

He gnawed and slashed and showed his reign.


 

The poor little flower was shredded to bits

 

So did the bear after his agonizing fits

 

He left the rose wilting and brown

 

And left the woods with more than a frown.


 

Sorrowful years had long passed

 

The little bud was standing at last

 

She grew steadily but was now red and tall

 

Till one day she heard a distant call.


 

It was the bear; he was back.

 

Crying for forgiveness for the attack.

 

The rose pondered and thought  with a prance

 

Will she ever give the bear a chance?


© 2017 Abigail Latoreno



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Abigail Latoreno
The photo is not mine, credits to the owner.

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The poor bear! Feeling betrayed like that, I kinda felt bad. Such a beast but had a heart for this rose. Of course the rose did nothing to begin with, it's but a rose with thorns, the bear was ignorant of that. Wow this was actually a really good story/poem. Thank you for sharing it!

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abigail Latoreno

5 Months Ago

Thanks for reading. I'm very new here and I'm so glad to see someone reading my first work.
Damien Ridge

5 Months Ago

Of course!



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We do often hurt the one's we love - that's for sure. And some say you cannot hurt those whom you truly love. But there's the paradox. Which view is right?
An understanding rose would forgive but always be wary methinks. Quite powerful imagery. Might scare a child...

Posted 3 Months Ago


Wonderful storytelling and powerful imagery. I wish the ending was more satisfying. I want to know what happens next. I feel like I need some closure after this sweet, but heart wrenching story.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abigail Latoreno

5 Months Ago

Aww thank you so much, I really appreciate your review. Well I do agree the ending is quite vague bu.. read more
loved your poem. you just animated your poem and i could sense and see it in your words.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abigail Latoreno

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for taking the time to read it. I'm glad you like it
Just goes to show what the results are if we do not accept our diversities - great write, good imagery and poignant message - well written! PS to forgive is divine!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abigail Latoreno

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for the review. Im glad you like it and I appreciate the advice. I think you are t.. read more
This is a very intriguing story of a bear and rose.....to some extent it reminds me of The Little Prince. If I may, though, provide you with a few notes on it, I would like to say that despite the strong imagery, and good story telling, the musicality gets wordy and wonky here and there to be able to flow smoothly, and there are also a couple of lines that don't quite make sense (which are merely worded as they are to get the rhyme in), such as Last Stanza Line 2....the bear was crying out for forgiveness while attacking again? doesn't quite compute.....you seemed to be wanting to mean that the bear was crying out for forgiveness for having attacked previously. This is a splendid start. I much enjoyed the story, and if the musicality were to be tweaked to perfection, and those relatively incomprehensible lines fixed, this would be a gem. Good start!

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abigail Latoreno

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your review. It is very informative. And yes, now that I think of it, that lin.. read more
emipoemi

5 Months Ago

any time. always happy to help.
I saw a direct correlation between how people can be cruel to the very things they love when they gut-react to hurt. I liked this, others can advise you on the various technical points of poetry - I am not a poet - but, I do know what can hold water with a theme and carry it to fruition. Nicely done.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abigail Latoreno

5 Months Ago

I'm very happy to know that you liked my work. I admit that I have no idea on the technicalities of .. read more
I think this was one of the sweetest poems I have ever read, I didn't have to take a break to think 'what just happened?' It is beatifully written, and I really want to see more like this!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abigail Latoreno

5 Months Ago

I am flattered to hear that, thank you so much. It does have a storybook feel to it and I'm happy to.. read more
Very nice but excellently written ......

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abigail Latoreno

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much
I love the details and the imagery in this piece. It is relatable and has a moral to the story. Love how you ended it with a question not answered. Real life doesn't always have answers

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abigail Latoreno

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for the review and I am happy to know that you enjoyed it. True, sometimes life or.. read more
Oh... Well then... This was actually... Bits and fits of agonizing wit... Has a thorn-less thorn rose ever been born, as we bore no scorn... I hope... This had a gorgeous flow landscape to it, and wordplay that depicts a strong sense of image-command... A bear and rose... I loved it, and am a fan... Sharply penned...

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abigail Latoreno

5 Months Ago

I am honored by your words. Thank you so much and I'm glad you enjoyed it
Silente

5 Months Ago

Very much so, my pleasure

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Abigail Latoreno
Abigail Latoreno

Baybay, Leyte, Philippines



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I am a college student who has a passion for writing (when I'm in the mood). I like to read an assortment of writing and genres but I am particularly attracted to the horror genre. I'm a big fan of St.. more..

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