Perfect Solitude

Lyrics to a song to be sung...

              

            Perfect Solitude

                                 By Sami Khalil                          

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I want to invite you

Even if you're uncomfortable

To my perfect solitude.

I want you to relax

Take a deep breath

Mind you this imprisonment

We are being glued.

Would you happen to know

Or have you overlooked

The backgrounds we share

The velvet thoughts

The adverts fading away

Into the hypnotic mood.

Lady of grace

Of brighter mornings

Of mislabeled nights

I want to remake songs

Where everything is

Merely a cover

A muffled substitute.

I want to lead in love

Keeping it low key

Where every prelude 

Is a quiet rendition 

To these two hearts

In perfect gratitude.

I want to invite you

When you are comfortable

To my perfect solitude

To my perfect solitude... 

Reviews

[Wondering Mind]

I was once told that solitude is to be destitute of Love, or the one you love; I was much younger then and I didn't believe. Now, with all these years on my shoulders, I'm a believer..
Now to your profound poetry; the perfect solitude would only be not that, but perfection with the one that makes you whole.... Lovely, and apologies for going off in at tangent

[AnnaLeQuinn]

I always liked your style. Free verse is the best ;) Means your mind is full of wanderlust.
"Lady of grace
Of brighter mornings
Of mislabeled nights
I want to remake songs
Where everything is
Merely a cover
A muffled substitute."

This reminds me of what my other half always says to me. "I want to write our story, love. Not sit back and let you go". I think it's sweet.

Very nice.

Anna

[emmajoy]

'Where every prelude -- Is a quiet rendition ' As to 'perfect solitude' - where two are one, perhaps?

There's a happy change of style with this beautiful post, Sami. Your medium is more free verse than structured, a lesser usage of complex words, more delicate, more naturally loving, perhaps. Maybe there's a more familiar air about your phrasing? What- and whichever, it all just flies into the mind's busy eyes, mind and heart.

[Miss Sharon]

Wow Sami! This is awesome. Love, love, love these lines...(I want to lead in love Keeping it low key Where every prelude Is a quiet rendition To these two hearts In perfect gratitude.) My, my...is it a tad warm in here? LOL

[smilempsn]

It took me to a perfect solitude, to feel the way you wrote it.
I can definitely see a tune to this song.. And hope it surely is sung :)
(May be I only will try to sing it :P )


Well done Sami once again, I have not been here for a while..
But I see a lot of your new work, and hope to read them all :)

[aLittlePain]

What a gorgeous seduction. Dripping in mood so viscous it coats the pallete...so smooth. This is meditation for the soul and spirit.

Beautiful! Rach x

[RomaJ]

This piece is both beautiful and alluring. I like how the first line is inviting. It draws the reader in and captivates. Solitude is precious. A place to renew and restore. Our restless minds and spirits. To share in that solitude is to offer a gift, in discovering new joys, in moments made of pure bliss.
A very lovely and delightful read.

[andrew mitchell]

Sami, this read like Ravel's Bolero, nice and smooth seduction luring the women's love into your trust, then huff and puff and blow her house of lust/ love down in Holst's Planets, the final crescendo before the final curtain falls in blissfull sleep for two. This write was the calm before the storm!lol:) Great stuff Sami.

[ms. barrie]

this is poetic beauty at its finest, Poet Friend...your words paint an alluring
landscape that both awakens a stagnant imagination *writer's block*
and invites to soar.
solitude is indeed comforting, for it recharges one's emotional and mental batteries
a vacation if you will...to look inward & try to remember lessons learned from
experience, or to exhale the beauty of them. your words are always a joy to
read. love every word you have used & how you used them. again, this is pure
beauty & something i needed to read tonight. so glad to have come back and
read your gifted ink, Sami. :) 100,00000000xs - favs//100th

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I'm blown away by your review and the beauty of its words. They are a poem in themselves. I kept wondering where have you been but I understand situations. So grateful for all. Tried to leave a review but could not for some reason on your poems....)))))

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome...reality called & i have been doing extensive research, being inspired for my horror novel, which takes place/will, in the middle ages...i had the concept for it since 08' and i'd like to pen it before i'm 90! i am also trying to pen new writings...something different from my norm. -- yes, i noticed for me, that expecting/wishing for reviews would leave me down when i didn't receive them, and it sort of was taking away from the real joy of actually writing. just me, personally . but will always re visit your art and other authors that i enjoy -- as usual i am slow on the uptake...i hope you've been well, poetic friend! :))))))

[Derekv]

This is poetry on another level, and the ability to create a mood in the reader with your work is amazing. Great job!