you place together these broken pieces of me

to find comfort in your arms is disconcerting (to me)
for I have been hurt, and within that pain
i lost pieces of my faith, my innocence
(some of my sweetness, too)

i settle into the curve of your palm
happy to stay here [for a while]
in this gentle cradle

your kindness touches me
as tangibly as your lips at my cheek.

the way you look at me
[so respectful and sweet]
makes me feel like a lady

when your eyes meet mine
[with desire]
i want to melt into the swirls of your fingertips
and taste the salty secrets of your skin

each time we part
-i think it will be the last-
yet
every time i find that i return

yes, every time i learn
a little more about the way
your heart beats

every time i add my fragrance
to your rumpled cotton sheets.

my heart
has cried a lifetime, it seems -
for (initially) a boy
shattered glass within my chest
and yet somehow you [slowly]
bring the pieces back together
(reflecting hope every which way)...

suddenly there is a new way to see

suddenly there is a heart
beating clearly
inside of me.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

another divine piece of literature my dear... showing how when we are hurt it can be hard to get close to another until someone breaks through those protective walls to see inside our glass heart and giving it the curtain it needs to feel protected again... what can I say your way with words is unmistakeable and incredible.

every time i add my fragrance
to your rumpled cotton sheets.

these lines here by the way... WOW... now these is very sweet but sexy

[Steffi]

"every time i add my fragrance
to your rumpled cotton sheets."

[RareRed]

"My heart has cried a lifetime it seems".....that stood out to me. You could feel the hesitation and yet all at the same time you can feel the hope at the thought of love, real love. Real Write. I really enjoyed this!

[SM Davis]

This is beautiful! The hesitance and the emotion are bound perfectly together.

[JoSamarthi]

Wow..I must say, this is the best I've ever read since I've been on Writer's.. everything is so perfectly in place! The flow, the emotions, the thoughts, the words.. a Beauty 10/10

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is gorgeous .. i love your writing style the added parenthesis ..
the subtle sensuality .. the hope .. a great line for me ...lines ..:

i settle into the curve of your palm
happy to stay here [for a while]
in this gentle cradle

Very enjoyable..

Chloe
xoxo

[Kristen R. Heyl]

"my heart
has cried a lifetime, it seems - " evoked such a strong emotional response in me. I love the idea that though your heart has been shattered, you have found someone who has been able to piece it back together.

[Matthew Marquis]

I think that you can do well without the parenthetical remarks. Fitting them in to the fabric of the work might be a little bit more challenging but I think it would strengthen the overall piece. This is just a personal thing, though (I'm not a fan of parenthetical comments).

every time i add my fragrance
to your rumpled cotton sheets.

I love these lines.

[Maria Retz]

This is so wonderful. It made me smile :-)

So relieving and beautiful

[Gandré]

This is is honest, and so true.

"to find comfort in your arms is disconcerting (to me)
for I have been hurt, and within that pain
i lost pieces of my faith, my innocence
(some of my sweetness, too) " =======>>>>> exactly, you say it for us, all women.

Another brilliant poem of you.