Disenchanted

Disenchanted

(Poem by Serenus)

 

You put a spell on me

 That’s why my vision was slanted

I fell head over heels

A hopeless romantic

 

Enchanted

By your beauty

Infatuated with your face

Enamored by your aura

Mesmerized by your grace

 

With eyes locked

Walking arm in arm

Who would’ve thought

I’d be harmed by your charms?

 

Then your fairy dust

Became a witches brew

Your ill intentions became obvious

And I lost interest in you

 

Suddenly I was awoken

The curse was broken

I was no longer a slave

To your poisonous love potion

 

Frantic -You couldn’t stand it

Me finding out

That you are under-handed

 

...This is not how you planned it

 

Funny...

I use to adore your antics

Now I see you

 For who you truly are…

Damaged

...By your own magic

You're now summoning tears

But I know it's just

Smoke and mirrors

I am now unaffected

Clear-headed

And thankfully...

Disenchanted

 

 

Reviews

[Nina St. Moritz]

Found this through Magical Mythical Mystery Compendium. I like the way this poem is short, but contains the essence of a fairy tale. The rhyming is nice and flowing, and the themes of darkness and deceit are prominent. This is definitely a nice exhibition of a darker fairy tale, much like Snow White and the Huntsman. I've always preferred the darker side to the iconic magical stories, and you wove this one quite nicely.
L. d'Argent

[Sirius King]

thanx for checking it out :-)

[Sid]

great write this...really liked the way the beauty turned out be an evil seductress...great work!!

[Sirius King]

thanx for checking i out! :-)

[lothlorienwriter]

JPH told me to have a look at this as he thought it a good poem but very much under reviewed.I have to agree with him on this. An interesting fairytale that descends into darkness and disenchantment. Hopefully others will notice the good write soon.

[Sirius King]

wow, i appreciate you checking it out!
thanx for the great review :-)

[diaryofanegress]

I love this. Very poignant.

[Sirius King]

thanx for checking it out :-)

[Bewitching Sensations]

loved reading this... :)

[Sirius King]

thanx for reading :-)

[Bewitching Sensations]

thats ok x

[Sirius King]

A nice poem, on the fairytale of Snow white, and with a great twist, of being totally bedazzled by some power, that is stronger than your own, at the moment, mesmerizing yes. Nice penned poet!

E.L.

[Sirius King]

thanx for reading :-)

Very welcome, my pleasure