But when?

But when?

A Poem by Mr.Writer
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But when...?

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I need a hope
a reason
to live in this world

I need someone
to hold my hand and tell me
it's going to alright

Someone who could love me;
all life and never
leave me alone

Celebrate every moment
of happiness we get
and cherish it to our fullest

Twirling me around 
on the dance floor
and picking me up when I fall

Doing the simplest things with me
like talking walks around the park
or going shopping with me

Having beautiful children
and deciding on names
for them , together

And at the end of the day
being with me again as we say
how much we appreciate each other

© 2017 Mr.Writer


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it could be..''it's going to be alright''

and instead of a someone that could love me..it could be,''someone who could love me all life and never leave me alone''.
so these were two sort of sentences i found...overall the poem is amazing..such beautiful imagery..keep writing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Wajiha for the feedback and review! :)
Clear yet deep, well expressed.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Thank you Sonnie! :)
A dream is a wish your heart makes... This truly explained it. So sweet and made me smile. It was a good write and it was a feel write. Hope you find that someone. Good luck

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

I agree with you!
Thank you so much Heart :)
heartspeaks

6 Years Ago

you're welcome
This was a very clear poem. A real dream from the heart of one wrote it. Good poem. A real keeper. Do some more.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Joanna! :)
I will do more
A special someone can be the solution to all our problems.
You expressed it well through this.
Good work Mr.Writer!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Najam Us Saher

6 Years Ago

Now you're thanking the right person. 😄
Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Hahah true :P
Wajiha Nayeem

6 Years Ago

lol yes...
So deep. I really liked it. I felt like you expressed my feelings.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Najam! :)
Najam Us Saher

6 Years Ago

You're welcome. ☺
This reads like a "prayer". Humans are wired to yearn for other humans and especially one that seems meant for us alone. You captured this in eloquent and literary style...something that seems to elude me these trying days...
A "prayer" for this Sunday morning, and I thank you.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

That's a really nice way to see this poem! Even I didn't realize that tbh.
Thank you so muc.. read more

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Mr.Writer
Mr.Writer

Toronto, Ontario, Canada



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