Mourning...

This poem is about a girl who wants to give a message to her dead friend.

Mourning…

I saw him standing beside me,

Through every thick and thin

That life had to offer.

Back then, I never knew

Why he did so…

 

Never believed in love.

Was scared of commitments.

Orphan as I was,

Even with a family of four…

 

When everyone turned their backs,

I convinced myself…

That it was better this way.

Alone and away.

Not caring about what the others would think or say.

 

But even from the wall

I built around myself,

I could see him,

Smiling at me…

An honest smile.

 

He didn’t say much,

And I never bothered to ask.

Little did I know,

That his fate was even

Worse than mine…

 

And now, every piece inside me

Wants to shout and scream,

And tell him,

That I do care…

That I want to be there for him…

 

But now, no matter how hard I try,

My voice can no longer reach him…

For now, he lies in a box,

Where shines eternal peace.

Now, he knows no grief or pain.

 

It’s always quiet there…

So quiet that the silence hurts me.

So, I sit beside him

On holidays.

Dressed in black,

With some flowers,

I light some incense.

And cry…

Cry to fill that silence…

To complete that emptiness.

 

Cry in the hope,

That he listens…

Listens to these words that can no longer reach him…

 

Author's Note

I wrote this poem out of my imagination. I would appreciate your views about the poem. Thanks a lot. :)

Reviews

[kogomai1]

it is great to be able to read some poems on this site, and have it so blatantly obvious that they write from the heart... i read this poem, and it made me.. feel like there was something i was missing in life today, it made me feel....sad, this poem has made me look at my priorities in life a little differently....
your an amazing writer moonlight, and keep on writing

[Moonlight]

Thanks a lot kogomai1... ! It makes me really happy that my work could reach out to you! And thank you so much for your review! I really appreciate it! :)

[prince digbani]

silence, a very powerful tool capable of inflicting pains on afflicted souls. Death a strong who dont care about the feelings of this world. we have to live everyday loving and appreciating everyone around us.

[Carlos Cuban Medina]

I really enjoyed reading it, I'm new to the website and this is the first poem I've read from someone else other than myself here, brought a really good start :)

[Moonlight]

I am really glad that you liked it Carlos! I hope you have a great time here! Thanks for your review! :)

[Carlos Cuban Medina]

No problem! I I think I'll read some more of your work, I can't wait to see what else you post ! really nice :)

[Moonlight]

I really appreciate it! :)

[B.J]

Your imagination flows fluently. I enjoyed the read

[Moonlight]

Thanks a lot! I really appreciate your stopping by.. B.J ! :)

[B.J]

Your welcome

[1Disawsum]

Wow... you truly write from the heart. Brought tears to my eyes, reading this poem. It hurts, doesn't it? Great write, loved it xxx

[Moonlight]

Wow! That really means a lot! Thanks so much! :)

[1Disawsum]

No problem! It's all true xx

[El Chico]

very honest, i like it great poem!

[Moonlight]

Thanks a lot El Chico! :)

[Lizardo]

The second stanza was really my favorite one
Really good poem Moonlight, I loved it

[Moonlight]

Thanks a lot Lizardo! I'm glad you liked it.. :)

[ANTO]

Its a great write Shivangi - you put yourself in the shoes of a friend who was devastated by the loss of another and you nailed it. I was moved by your words - particularly this part -
"It’s always quiet there…
So quiet that the silence hurts me.
So, I sit beside him
On holidays.
Dressed in black,
With some flowers,
I light some incense." - very beautiful sentiments .

[Moonlight]

Thank you so much Anto! I really appreciate it! :)

[Eagergreen]

I have a friend who died every week I write to him and burn the letter let the meaning escape into the world

[Moonlight]

I see...
I'm very sorry about your friend... I truly am.... I don't have anyone like that, so it wont be very proper of me to say anything... However, I do want to tell you, that if that friend really meant a lot to you, then I'm sure he/she wouldn't want you to hang onto him/her... and probably want you to stay strong and move ahead in life, accepting all losses life has to offer.
Best wishes,
Moonlight.

[Eagergreen]

It's cool I believe apirits stay about or at least a ripple of them and I do this to dedicate it to them

[Moonlight]

That's really good! :)

[Bee C.]

It's really touching, with not knowing that "his fate was even worse than mine", that line really stood out to me. So much we don't know, and if only we could see... You never truly know what is going on for someone else.
This is poignant and it's well written, but I wonder if you should add more description to this to really draw the reader in. Make them feel sad about losing him too. But no matter. I enjoyed this. Especially that third-to-last stanza... beautifully done!

[Moonlight]

Thanks a lot Bee C. I would definitely consider your opinion and try to make some improvements if I can come up with the right lines. Thanks again. I really appreciate it. :)