the truth

When I see him I feel heart broken but when he smiles I feel safe and sound,When I think about him I get lonely but why do I Feel this every time .When we past each other I feel unseen and now I feel that im just a looking glass that he sees right through .

Reviews

[747]

Tell me more. With the structure you have here, I want to see more. You've only shared half a story. I'm with you in that story, but it went by too fast, missing details of things that you can share.
However, if you instead decided to break it up into poetic form, I would think it to make a nice though sad short little poem.
Either way your expression is strong, it just feels incomplete. Just my opinion.

[PSYCHO-LOVE]

thank you iwas thinking about rewirting it for a while but i wait to see what others would say about it first so that i could learnand inprove it better than i would have done on my own.
-THANK YOU SWEET

[PSYCHO-LOVE]

working on another story so it might take me awhile to get to this one i want to sa that i might finish the story around ending january early febuary

[PSYCHO-LOVE]

Its pass the t came out of nowhere

[Dark Waters]

ohhh got it

[Josh Ames]

Pretty sad, and I like it!

[Dark Waters]

I like it >_< Perroooo.... is is "pass" or "past"?