The Mysterious Man

The Mysterious Man

A Poem by storiestotell

A young girl meets up with the man of her dreams!



Monday was the first time I saw him

He walked into the crowded room

I spotted him right away

His dark blue eyes felt like they were alluring me to come to him




Tuesday he came into the grocery store where I worked

I prayed he would come to my check out lane

but he went through the express lane instood!


Wednesday I woke up in a funk

Why was I acting like this?

I didn't even know him,

but I felt peaceful when he was near


Thursday I went for a walk in the park

He was sitting on a bench by  the pond

I headed toward him, but heard my name

When I turned back, he was gone



Friday I stayed in bed all day

When I slept I saw his face

Something about him was  surreal



Saturday I decided to go to a party

My heart was breaking, he never showed up

I drank too much, trying to drown my sorrow

When I left I knew I shouldn't drive, but I did!



Sunday I awoke in the hospital

I felt a presence in my room

I looked beside my bed, it was him!

He was bright and shiny

I felt at peace

"Don't be afraid," he said.

"I'm your angel of death!"

































© 2010 storiestotell

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If you know the definition of severe irony. Girl season man that has a crush on him after a while she gets depressed over not seeing him and then she ends up in the hospital next to the angel of death Which was the man is she had a crush on. I love the ending to this! It's very surprising and it pleased me so. Even though I never really have much of a rhyme scheme or rhythm to it

Posted 6 Years Ago

Oh wow, love the surprise ending! Good read!

Posted 7 Years Ago

oh my goodness.. quite an unexpected end. Good write.

Posted 7 Years Ago

I feel chills running up and down my spine lol

Firstly congrats on the effective use of color.

And secondly, this poem scared me, in a good way^

You have proven what other talented artists are proving, and that is that you don't need rhyme or convention to write a good poem^


Posted 7 Years Ago

WOW! That was totally unexpected! I thought it would be a love poem! WOW! That was intense!

Posted 7 Years Ago

I wasn't expecting that, you created a strange kind of suspense.

Posted 7 Years Ago

The Angel of Death ain't good to have around. I like the story in this poem. You create a very good tale. I like the twist at the end. A outstanding story. Thank you.

Posted 7 Years Ago

this is a perfect 10!

Posted 7 Years Ago

Love the surprise ending!

Posted 7 Years Ago

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Added on December 1, 2010
Last Updated on December 4, 2010
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