Trying to Write a Tune

just a wee little brain fart

Well I'm sitting in the back

drinkin' ciders, gettin' whacked

I'm tryin' to write a tune

I hope I write one soon

My inspiration's tickled

When I get a little pickled

"cause it's logic that I lack

Though my brain is still intact

I come up with real doozys

when I get a little boozy

and I sing em out of tune

my friends think I'm a loon

So I'll just sit here drinkin'

Gettin drunk, but still I'm thinkin'

Tryin' to write a tune

I hope I write one soon

My muse still softly teases

as the booze it slowly eases

This funk I'm sitting in

Maybe I should switch to gin

Now it's getting really dark

and the song a question mark

but moving's too much trouble

Cause I think I'm seeing double

I've gotten to the junction

Where my braincells cease to function

I'm getting really gooned

I think I'll sleep till noon

I'm trying to write a tune

I hope I write one soon

Reviews

[barleygirl]

The irony in your little tune is delightful! Always love your inventive words & phrases to describe getting hammered so your many references to drinking never sound repetitive. Even tho this is perfectly written as wanting to write a song, this scenario represents all those who embark on creativity with some substance enhancements. I love how this starts out hopeful, then degenerates into just another bender, so that the same phrases that felt hopeful at the start of your poem, sound bitingly sarcastic at the end. You sharply capture how ANYONE living in denial operates (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[emipoemi]

I read this and I for some reason I hear a nanny goat singing it with a banjo! This is awesome! I was bobbing to the beat of this one! Well done!

[Misterr Remeat]

I guess it isn't that b b a a a a d !

[Tabby Mac]

I love this! It's fun. It's catchy! I could feel the beat as I read it! I want more! I enjoyed this piece!
Tabby

[Misterr Remeat]

Thanks! I was a little blurry when I wrote it

[APOORVA]

My muse still softly teases
as the booze it slowly eases
This funk I'm sitting in
Maybe I should switch to gin
Superb one, these lines are so natural that anyone can relate with.

[Misterr Remeat]

oops! just switched to Whisky! Thanks !

[EcstaticEuphoria]

Ha I love these rhymes! Very creative, very whimsical. Great job

[Misterr Remeat]

Thanks. I had fun writing it....I think

[Mr.Writer]

Wow... very rhymeful!! :D

[Misterr Remeat]

Thanks!Written last summer while lazing in my hammock. cheers