Born alike

Born alike

A Poem by tanmay7551
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Assassin meets another person alike and prepares for the final battle

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Machine at work, robotic actions

Hands make no mistake but the absence of mind.

Creation of the streets and cruel world

Every day brings peace of revenge.

Mentored for cruelty and cold blood rules

Skills to rip-off toughest bones

Guilt missing in heart and mind

The fearless approach, isolated life.

Non-existent identity with camouflaged character

The World is but a game, Rule " to play hard.

Smoked pipes, lifeless bodies

Cuts of knives, holes of bullets

Penetration by stealth

Morals unknown, humanity lost

Call of duty sounds of coins.

Weakness of relations spared

Flesh and bones in love with tolerance

Smile to deceive, courteous attacks

No counts registered of heinous feats.

Leaping behind trees in dark

Advancing invisible and sudden brakes.

Here comes the only being dear,

Clone of my heart, born alike,

Ultimate battle begins till death.


© 2016 tanmay7551



Author's Note

tanmay7551
The cold-blooded killer has no humanity and is born out of societies atrocities. He loves or likes no one until on his assignment he meets a person alike and prepares for final battle.

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A well crafted and tense scene of two formidable foes meeting for a decisive fight: both described as calculating but also as if this life of violence is all they know. I like how they were depicted as equals and that further helps leave the ending open, you let the reader ponder what happened next. Thanks for sharing, I like this!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

1 Year Ago

Thanks Jack for your kind words!
Jack Necron (Aubrey Jack Peaslee)

1 Year Ago

You are welcome!



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Truly intense. Thanks for sharing

Posted 6 Months Ago


A well crafted and tense scene of two formidable foes meeting for a decisive fight: both described as calculating but also as if this life of violence is all they know. I like how they were depicted as equals and that further helps leave the ending open, you let the reader ponder what happened next. Thanks for sharing, I like this!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

1 Year Ago

Thanks Jack for your kind words!
Jack Necron (Aubrey Jack Peaslee)

1 Year Ago

You are welcome!
I am a big fan of political thrillers...assassin books, more or less, so this poem really falls into that realm. I love it. Love these lines: Clone of my heart, born alike, Ultimate battle begins till death.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for the review and letting me know about your interests on political thriller.
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The last line sent me for a loop. Ultimate battle begins till death.. Nice ending to a powerful piece.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much, I am glad that you liked it!
Good story line, TN. The idea of two assassins meeting in battle is pretty good. I would like to see a separation in the writing when the second assassin enters the story, just for clarification.

There are a couple of spots where the words are a bit jumbled i.e.

'Smoked pipes, lifeless bodies
Cuts of knives, holes of bullets
Penetration by stealth'

the second line would smooth out if changed a bit

Smoked pipes, lifeless bodies
knife cuts and bullet holes
Penetration by stealth

You've got a good one going here. Keep working

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

1 Year Ago

Thanks Ted for your kind words and suggestions. Will surely help.
Powerful use of words and thoughts. You left a lot for the reader to think about. All of us have seen hate and violence and we still allow it. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

1 Year Ago

Than you so much for reading and inspiring words.
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

You are welcome my friend.
Hmm...Each and everyday humans are doing this..
Glad to read about this topic..
Different but good..

Keep writing :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

1 Year Ago

Thank you Ashish, I am glad that you liked it...
One killer meets another...hopefully both die at the same time. War is something like this, all lose in the end. Valentine

Posted 1 Year Ago


tanmay7551

1 Year Ago

True, thanks for your insight Valentine.
a great write but scary,our society is moving toward this mentality daily

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your review, Dear friend.
i love this...it is like "the godfather" meets "terminator 2"--

mindless killing machines...living for the violence...

quite nicely done, tanmay.

j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much J, your words are uplifting!

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Tags: assassin, born alike, born the same, final battle, ultimate battle, hired to kill, killer, murder, born assasin

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bangalore, KR, India



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