So Cold

Speaks of one's behavior upon reactions

As I lay down a plot to revenge, I realize where should I begin
 on all the sins that took my friends.
Where is everyone?
I feel as if they left me lonely, and now I'm fainting
by the misery that wont let me myself
This feeling with such power, is like crashing from the moon
I begin to realize, I have so much to lose.

If you could only see the light
and how fast life goes by
you wouldn't live to see the way
of how great, you'll  be someday

I'm sitting here with my head down now thinking
should I scream and shout
or should I get up somehow?
But I'm still dazed by how not amazed I
see the world change
or did i change yet I feel crazy
and I never thought maybe
there was hope to save me

You can see in a way that will make it someday
along with this feeling of burning sensation
in your veins
just let whatever light
shine up so bright
because there is always time
to make things right

Never turn back all of the past is dead
let it all go before you lose your head
when you realized where was the love?
It makes you think again
Once, now twice

your stuck with the pain
and yet whose is to blame?

Author's Note

allow the grammar and confusion of this poem to be slightly ignored

Reviews

[12.09am]

WOW ! this is truly amazing, i particularly loved the 4 line stanza and the last 2 lines ! beautifully sculpted.

[Jessica Fulcher]

Brilliant Marshall..

[Truly Ross-Wisehart]

There is a positive message within the painful contemplation. Thank you for sharing this. Keep at it. :)

~True

[TidgeTiger]

I really enjoyed this for what it was, you sharing some emotional journey. :) thankyou for doing so, :) flowed very nicely, and created some nice conceptual imagery

[Honey]

Great poem..I can really relate to being sad and feeling like your friends have bailed on you. I thought this poem flowed really nicely.

[Shamrock]

Keep writing, you have so much to give. You have got great talent and need to keep writing and develop your writing.

[Shamrock]

Hang in there! you got great thoughts and word things well. writing can relieve the pain. But just remember what you write and print will always be in print. Keep writing. I will watch for you.

[anson ward]

thats pretty deep in my opinion. the first stanza makes me grateful