The House of Cards

The House of Cards

A Poem by Mauricio Montoya
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The hands were dealt with

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The king has his queen

A realm of princes and princess

As the jacks hold ground

To command a kingdom

From ten to one

in all four corners

The count

Always remains the same

Yet one fine sad day

The joker ceased to laugh

Instead he cried

How can we build a house?

If we won’t follow suit

To our demise

 we'll tumble.

 

By Mauricio Montoya


© 2014 Mauricio Montoya



Author's Note

Mauricio Montoya
I came up with this piece while playing cards with a friend, its been awhile since I’ve written anything so drop me a few lines, let me know what you think.
Thank you, your friend and hope I still am.... Mauricio

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A cleverness of words using the royals and commoners of the pack, and the villain joker proclaims a game to the death - perhaps!? Not at all sure I've interpreted your meaning correctly but, do think your use of the words is individual and the font etc. reminds this friend how well you write!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Very nice use for a desk of cards. You gave life and sad ending for the cards. I enjoyed the poem. Need some artwork and a very interesting tale. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Such a clever, fanciful poem! This was a pleasure to read, excellent writing!! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

an enjoyable witty and clever write...united we stand...divided we fall..love it;

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well done using the cards to lay out your theme. What a great inspiration to write a short poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Tex
Very clever write, with a very strong message *stand together*.. I just loved the style and thought pattern you used here... very strong write.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ohh, nice!
I love this :)
Instead of divide, connect...if we all stand together, we could be so much more :)
Clever!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I got your message but for some reason i cant reply back so send me a friends name on uryour fb and Ill look for you okay.(((:

Posted 5 Years Ago


Excellent images built to increasing suspense as the cards managed to take personality of their own and thus created a story of intrigue and defeat. Very crafty theme and skillfully woven poetic story!

Posted 5 Years Ago


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A clever perspective!

Posted 5 Years Ago


a cleverly crafted poem

Posted 5 Years Ago



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Mauricio Montoya
Mauricio Montoya

Petaluma, CA



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Love to draw and cook from time to time, when I'm not drawing I’ll write poems. My favorite poet is Edgar Allen Poe. more..

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