i'm LOST here..!

i am lost in this crowd

and i'm unable to find the path

which will lead me to my soul

those devils tried to douse my 

inner soul, is trying to step on me

i tried so hard but i'm sorry they succeed

i'm struggling so hard,

trying to pass this kingdom of hell,

where i'm unable to see

my own footsteps,

unable to see me.its so dark

and my heart is filled with darkness

finally i have stepped on 

broken pieces of mirror...

like the broken pieces of my heart

and moved ahead from hell

but it still feels i'm standing on hot coal

but i have passed it

and i'm glad i have made an attempt

to move AHEAD..

Author's Note

....!sometimes life take us to a stage where we are unable to find ourself...!and we try so hard to move ahead....!

Reviews

[Amanda]

i think that we all go through this type of private hell from time to time...i have had this happen to me, who hasn't? it is part of the human condition and i would think that if one didn't, they wouldn't truly be alive...it is what you do about it that matters. the road we all travel is marked with rough spots, but we go on..we have to.

good work :)

Amanda

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Very very good. Thanks for sharing.

[Nish Nish the Fish]

Im so sorry it took me so long to get these,
You have such a way of emitting oodles of emotion through your poems, this and others.
you've captured "sadness" and the "lost" feeling with in the perfect words!
And you're absolutely right, we do try very hard to move forward from our unfortunate stages in life. We just gotta keep on keepin on!

Keep writing!
and thanks a ton for the request!

[NatashaSophia]

Interesting comparisons between what hell and demons are putting you through and your soul and heart. It seems as if it is really your emotions and thoughts that create the hell that you are experiencing.

Good Read, Cheers.

[Victoria Harlequin]

Awstacular,

Great write! :]

[Dreamy]

Sounds like a dark night of desperation, with all the answers and a peaceful calm coming in the morning.

[perfectlymetiKulous]

Beautifully written. It started off a bit hopeless, and then matured into hopefulness, and I definitely think that everyone in the world can identify. When things are difficult in life, it can seem a bit hopeless, but as we all know; life stops for no one, so we have to push through the hopelessness to gain hope. To understand that we will/must perservere no matter what.

[Anita B Jacques]

Nice write. The temptations can be overwhelming for our young people, take your time, slow down, and think careful before making a decision. The light is much stronger then the darkness. Choose your friends carefully. Your poem comes from the heart, keeep them coming. God Bless you.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Eh! This was beautiful..
It was so dark yet it ended up with a hope..to move on with life..
Very mature :)

[poetic soul]

:) :) lovely

:) Smiles,
Poetic Soul