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This is my first attempt at slam poetry, and I'm excited to film a performance of this piece over the coming day.
No Longer

No Longer

A Poem by Val Val
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State of the union address of sorts.

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March 21, 2008 / 2:22 pm


Live via satellite
Me through the line...
Yes, I've been gone.
Lost to my words and
Alone without connection
To internet pretension.
Floating despite the gravity
It's such a travesty that I
Jump jump jump from one
Bump bump bump to the
Next with no thought to the
Draught of my mind and the
Ties that bind and the tears
That will be cried no matter
What I tried yesterday or the
Way I swayed to the tip tip tap
Of the rap rap rap you pass as
Poetry or the waves that rolled
Over me and with all the words
I think and all the thoughts I bank
I will always be lifeless and tired,
Admired, conspired to find the well,
That photovoltaic cell that converts
My thoughts to viable plots with no
Luck, just f**k f**k f**k it. All I
Would do was muck it up with sledge,
I'm no longer cutting edge.

 

 

 


© 2008 Val Val



Author's Note

Val Val
Wake me if you like me, wake me if you want me, wake me if you want another poem...

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"Poetry or the waves that rolled
Over me and with all the words
I think and all the thoughts I bank
I will always be lifeless and tired,
Admired, conspired to find the well,"

I like those lines the most...Thank you for sharing...:)..................

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Val Val

3 Years Ago

Thank you for reviewing. :-)
Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

You are quite welcome...:)..............



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Well see...if you go around making your poem all flowy and shaping hour glasses in peoples heads you only have to blame yourself for not being cutting edge Val Val.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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JC
Ha, dig the flow and stream of thought and proclamation. Is a poem that I can chew on and makes me feel alive.

Posted 2 Years Ago


I think this is really good. I love how you used your words.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Now this one was interesting and quick read, good work:

Posted 3 Years Ago


This had a good flow if one reads it with a fast pace as I believe was intended

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Val Val

3 Years Ago

Thank you for the review. Yes, intended to be read fast. Most of my stuff is spoken word kind of jun.. read more
"Poetry or the waves that rolled
Over me and with all the words
I think and all the thoughts I bank
I will always be lifeless and tired,
Admired, conspired to find the well,"

I like those lines the most...Thank you for sharing...:)..................

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Val Val

3 Years Ago

Thank you for reviewing. :-)
Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

You are quite welcome...:)..............
A life undirectional. A tailspin of a tale. All over and back again.

Posted 7 Years Ago


"Alone without connection
To internet pretension." I love free verse. At the beginning I was lulled into a false sense of security thinking we were delving into rhyming couplets and then you pulled the rug out and slammed....so well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lie.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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