I flunk!

~ this was the time when i have nothing to write.... maybe a word play a bit but there is hidden meaning... ;)

 

 

I stare on a blank page, holding a thought

Unconventional imagery

Sub-divisional runway

a road - full of mystery

Signing-in to the puzzling riddle

Choices pops like a bubble

Fading, switching here and then

I rot till Forgotten

Fallen times, running in signs

 

Winter in summer

Cold as stone, I can’t even utter

 

Fragile as glass

String in Brass

Connecting

But suddenly cut

Verses in line

on top, I stop

Ending blank, I flunk !

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i see the writer trying to solve the puzzle of the words that are coming in fragments to him...a barrage of ideas, but he can't solve one of them enough to write a piece that holistically has a focus...he is all over the place...

starts one piece, gets halfway through and the inspiration stops..starts another ...same thing

----keeps hitting a wall..

well said.

jacob

[Pax]

smiling ~ your insight is a wonder mr. Jacob.... i keep hitting that wall, my inspirations stop, but my eagerness will not give up... so let's say pen on... grateful with your insight mr. Jacob... thank you very much...

[Jupiter]

I was questioning myself because I did not get it at first. After reading it a few times I got the word play, but I will be honest and say I did not find the hidden meaning. Either way, I love the feeling in this. I can hear this as a spoken word poem. Nice job!

[Pax]

then i flunk in you understanding, thank you for having a time in reading my work.

[Jupiter]

o_O You have me questioning again! LOL

You're welcome!

[Tate Morgan]

Wow your mind seems as jumbled as mine. i have a theory on that .When i remember things io think my mind takes them apart and stores like thoughts together .Like when i go swimming all thoughts of swimming are connected.But when i reassemble thoughts i think they brush against similar events and cause the brain to go off in tangents all directions

[Pax]

Thank you very much mr. Tate... those jumbled thoughts are a jungle in my mind. ~ crowded sometimes... but yes your are right they are connected because we all have the power create and imagine it to be... a pleasure to hear your thoughts about my work.

[Tate Morgan]

Well said

[Emily Feret]

I really like the idea of not being able to even process all the thought that are hitting you at once! I love this. Passion filled and a great read start to finish. Thank you for sharing!!

[Pax]

Thank you Emily, i appreciate your time and review for my work... grateful!

[captain]

The structure is really good. Life's road, choices & failure, that's what I get or I could be wrong. In your writer's block Pax you do have way in words.

[Pax]

thank you, Captain my friend... greatly with you always reading my work.

[Pax]

and your not wrong... this work can be intrepreted in many ways...

[Peter H]

superficially it seems to me like a writer who's struggling to find his way in the world , he seems to be struggling in somewhat way looking to find himself within all the mundane but he can't find inspiration so he puts together random lines but each have meaning subliminally to him of what he's feelings but at the very end he couldent make an articulate poem but he made a poem that appeals to everything in life > that's what i get idk if i'm spot on

[Pax]

thanks mr. Peter ~ there is no right or wrong in interpreting ~ it can be what the reader wanted it to be... each line has a definite feeling on it... and yes it goes to appeals in life... grateful with your review...

[gabrielle]

When i saw the word "blank page" i immediately thought that this piece is about life as i always associate blank page or blank canvass to life and it is our choice what to do to such blankness or emptiness as we are the ones holding the pen or the medium. Then i saw your description..it's about writers block. Now, i am much more interested on the hidden meaning (care to share what it is? lol). i do not see any failure in this kabayan, it's a creative write. The title is a bit misnomer but it's effective that way.

[Pax]

~ smiling ~ well the hidden meaning depends on you kabayan... i can say you are right on your interpretation , it's just a little part of writer's block but its more about life... i think all the elements of life is there... like: choices,road,string, signs & etc... i guess the only thing i fail are the choices i did in my life... we all go that road ika nga... thank you so much kabayan....

[Lethu]

This to me is ironic and very smart too, I tend to have the same problem and end up writing random stuff that ends up in the trash can but reading this just gave me a new idea on how to approach this problem. Good writing indeed.

[Pax]

thank you, I am glad you found an idea about it.... yes... when i wrote something i don't easy trash it, i save it for later even one liner... you'll never know you might used it in the future poems or write ups... thank you very much for having a time to read my work... grateful!

[Ency Bearis]

You did not flunk not even gone to blank like the writers' block, for you did a good job with this beautiful verses.

[Pax]

kabayan, maraming, maraming salamat!
~ I am so glad i didn't flunk, I am grateful with your support, always...

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Beautiful work,Pax. I know this feeling oh too well lol. But when you finally put that baby onto the page, there is truly nothing more rewarding. Great Work,my dear friend :)

[Pax]

~ smilling ~ Cord my friend, yes this baby of mine is quite elusive... still i love it ... like a father to his children... I am always a pleasure you come and read my work my friend... thank you very much :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Oh, that elusive image that was on the tip of the pen...then fades. You have captured that frustration and presented it here perfectly. Well done!

[Pax]

truly grateful with the review and vist... thank you very much... oh that pen, its keeps getting out of ink... and i just keep on refilling it... no matter what, like not giving up...