Battle for Twilight

Battle for Twilight

By Windstorm Kells ©2008

 

Shadows breach

Pearl essence reflected

Tears fall as rain

Resounding battle of sight

Each vying for supremacy

 

A cry of ire

Massive draconic forms of light

Safeguard the life giver

Sacrificing scaled bodies

For every inch darkness conquers

 

Continuum of vibrant hues

Stuns audience far below

In clouds their forms perceptible

An eternal war of luminosity

Between light and dark

 

Illumination concedes defeat

Twilight is past, night is here

The sparkle of stars like diamonds

All becomes tranquil

As sleeping giants lie

 

As dawn creeps into existence

Darkness flees in trepidation

Radiance consumes shadows

A fresh day emerges

Allowing our spirit to soar

 

 

 

Author's Note

read it like you are watching a sunset, what do you think?

Reviews

[Susan S.]

It was ever so evident in the reading of it that it was a stormy (metaphor there) sunset followed by night followed by dawn. How is it that viewing a picture of a sunset we can tell it's a sunset not a dawn? I've always wondered that even while I know I can do it.

Sorry for the delay in reading this. Put them in my request pile next time and I might see it sooner. I'm not sure.

Just one possible foible in the poem. You speak of the eternal struggle between light and dark as if it is a continual thing, yet at the end you treat it in the born and died cycle of life. I've always viewed those as mutually exclusive. Other than that, it's' a fairly decent bit of work!

Susan

[Tomás Ó C..]

The use of the colour scheme aids the flow of the poem greatly...

[Doug]

i think it's pretty cool. i like fantasy stuff. i really liked your word choice. nice write!

-doug-

[Chris Willits]

I like the presentation of this poem, how each stanza is typed in a different color. I like the way the poem unfolds as well. The descriptiveness of what you were expressing was great.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Amazing! I love the font you used, it really pulled me in, and the colors. And then the words just continued the beauty. the poem was refreshing, and was def like watching a sunset. Relaxing, calming, mesmerizing. thanks for sharing!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was beautiful. I love the format as much as the content, a true work of art. I loved "draconic forms of light." This brought images of dragons to my mind but also the constellation Draco. Excellent job on this.