Reascend

This continual struggle within me. Am I a fallen angel or a repentant devil. In the end, i am who i choose to be. And in that, there is strength.

Into worn earthen hands

Frayed, tattered cloths fall

Unbound from heaven

Into the choking, gasping

Death of the desert sand

Breathe. The lapping waves

Plant your footprints into

the grains of heat and light

Bathe on the barren land

and from earth, reascend.

Author's Note

All responses are welcomed. But please, im new :)

Reviews

[JulianaSun]

I´m also new :)

I like this poem more than the other one, especially because I´m particularly fond of the desert. Here, you create vivid imagery, golden and alive, like a short film slowly unfolding before the eyes. I like the style , too. No rhymes, just freedom . Also, nice metaphor :). We are all angels and demons at the same time.
J

[Abdul Aziz]

Devons usually hits the proverbial nail on the head in all his reviews, so there is probably not much I can say regarding the interpretation of this poem. Your language is powerful and your construction of sentences is sublime. There are conflicting images here like "death of the desert sand", followed by "lapping waves", which really bring into view the conflicted state of the narrator, as well as the mythical tone of the poem. Very well written, and I'd definitely like to read more of you!

[hanselwheresgretel?]

Hi, Abdul Aziz! your comments carries as much weight to me :) There is definitely conflict and transition here, and the way i see it is the shift in perspective of one's "desert" is all the difference it takes. Please, critique away! :)

[Devons]

I don't interpret this poem in the way it perhaps was intended, and I don't think the meaning is crystal clear in that respect - but I don't feel that to be as important here as the weight and feeling of the piece. There is an existential, mythical tone in the language which lends it that weight of meaning (depending on one's interpretation) and feeling, and there is a pleasing compactness in arrangement - both elements combining in testimony of a spiritual and philosophical intelligence. But there is defined craft here. Nicely written.

[hanselwheresgretel?]

Thanks Devons! i really like your honest opinion on it :)