Hitting a wall

Hope is always there.

There’s no way it could happen

And I woefully agree.

Most would say that she’s a ten,

But me, I’m more like a three.

 

It could never come about,

A fact that I’m sad to say.

It’s hard to keep hope alive,

When things are going this way.

 

I accept the fact its over,

Even before it began.

It’s a hard thing to realize:

The dead dreams of a young man.

 

But life is not going to change,

The sun won’t stop its shining.

There are still joys to be found,

Clouds have a silver lining!

 

I have traveling to do,

Discoveries to be made.

The road of life lies ahead,

Glittering like lime green jade.

 

Hope I know I’ll always have,

Though more troubling times will come.

The glow of life within me,

Will never grow dull or numb!

 

Author's Note

Feedback welcome!

Reviews

[Kait]

I love the way you started it. I mean the whole thing is a great piece, but the begginning is a brilliant starter.
"The road of life lies ahead
Glittering like lime green jade."
Like everyone else pointed out, this part is a great was to put it. But this part,
"But life is not going to change,
The sun won't stop its shining.
There are still joys to be found,
Clouds have a silver lining!"
is my favorite. I love the way you used that old silver lining saying in it. GREAT JOB!!

[Erin Was Here.]

I love this poem! The rhyming was mature and worked beautifully. I also picked up on the lines
"The road of life lies ahead
Glittering like lime green jade."
Nicely done.

[Grace Lea]

This is a fantastic piece, and perfectly shows the struggles we all go through as young people. I identified with every part of it, and 'glittering like lime green jade' was my favorite part :) well written jake!

[JudyC]

The road of life lies ahead,
Glittering like lime green jade.
For me, these beautiful lines depict hope as a journey, not just a destination. In straightforward language, you describe well how disappointment and regret can coexist with bright hope. Thanks for sharing!