Starlight

An ecstacy of despair. I feel quite cheerful having written it. Catharsis, anyone?

This face houses twin black holes.
Starlight does not escape them.
Suns, moons, consumed whole:
Dying agonies of explosive fusion
Crushed into extinction.
 
Love's rarefied atmospheres
Stripped away,
Body rent asunder by
Merciless gravity's embrace.
Dragged over the event horizon, she
 
Becomes invisible, is
Infinitely
Compressed
Into glittering adamantine despair.
Into stasis.

Reviews

[HippieSoulPunx]

Powerful words. The entire universe and its secrets have been condensed into those two eyes, eyes that are supposed to be windows to the soul, but in this case, windows to a despair that threatens to suck in anyone who comes close enough to gaze upon them. Incredible concept, to take such a complex thing as the universe, and allow that darkness to inspire even darker words. I'm really amazed reading this.

[Zugzwang]

Thanks, mate. I just had an idea and went with it. If I told you where I got the idea from, you would lose all respect for me, it's so embarrassing. Anyway, like lots of poetry there is a kernel of truth in there as well as a truly galactic scale exaggeration. But I don't care, I had a hoot writing it. Your analysis is pretty spot on, it's kind of about being a destructive force in my own life. Thanks for the review!

[Gabriel Enrique Montano]

"This face houses twin black holes.
Starlight does not escape them."
I love that metaphor! Great job.

[Zugzwang]

Yeah, it's pretty crazy but I like it too! Thanks for dropping by and thanks for the review.

[Firebird]

Your crushing vacuum of despair becomes horrific to me when you mention event horizon. That film was like a nightmare.

[Zugzwang]

Yeah, it was a pretty scary movie! It brings a lot of negative connotations but it's pretty old now, I guess most people don't remember it. I'm amazed tou did, actually. I think the event horizon is the point where the gravity is so great that light cannot escape. That blows my mind.

[Autumn Lyric]

This analogy is so great. I would have never equated the two, but your words here are profound, and astounding; furthermore, I am no stranger to feelings of despair, your poem captures the agonizing mood in a beautiful and mesmerizing way.

[Zugzwang]

Thanks LaShaye. Sorry I didnt reply earlier! I'm a hack, I got the idea watching an action movie (Ghostrider 2). I am a lover of metaphor, what can I say? But this is one of my favourites. I am very gratified that you liked it...thanks for the review!

[Autumn Lyric]

Your very welcome!

[WerTherBeDragons]

Deep & meaningful; personal & universal. Just got Fwd'd list of 'Human body facts' - "there are aprx. 100 Billion neurons in the human brain, which is roughly the same as the no. of Stars in the Milky Way". Your poem captures this for me. Your brain was 'firing on all cylinders' creating this one...

[Zugzwang]

Thanks Dragons! I'm pleased that you liked it. Its an inusual analogy I think. Yes I agree that my brain was firing on all cylinders when I wrote it...now I have writer's block! Haha...probably a good thing!

[WerTherBeDragons]

Aahh - the 'block'... Well, I guess just like 'thrashing' a bike/car, it takes sometime for things to cool down - so only temporary. Seems my brain has stuck in an analogical mode!!!

[Zugzwang]

I can't believe I wrote 'inusual'
Analogical is better than digitical.
It's good to give the brain a rest I reckon.

[J3ssInJupit3r]

So much power and beauty behind your words. I feel the passion. I normally would have thought "he is using big words to sound smart" but actually this flows really well and is not hard for anyone to understand. I am not sure why but "Dying agonies of explosive fusion
Crushed into extinction." was my favorite line. I think I like how it sounded, the words that you put next to each other. Great piece.
thank you for sharing.

[Zugzwang]

Thanks a lot! I actually know how you feel, I can't stand it when twits use unnecessarily verbose language to seem intelligent. Unfortunately I cant help it, It's how I think sometimes. At other times I keep it really simple, it depends on my mood and what I'm talking about.
I'm glad you liked that line, I actually agonised over that quite a bit!
Thanks for the feedback and review!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the paradox of feeling ecstatic about feeling despair...

absorbing wording in this write.

j.

[Zugzwang]

Yar, weird isn't it?
I kind of over exaggerate how I feel and feel exhilirated at getting the feelings out. There's something I like about that intensity of emotion, but I can't quite put my finger on it.
Think of a tortured teenage poet wallowing in a manufactured despair! Why not? I don't take myself that seriously (most of the time!).
Thanks for the review, kind sir!