First touch

First touch

A Poem by Céce


Edges of your eyes,
soft gathered lashes, I'm
trying not to look
too much.
My finger twitches
(I think you see)
and in a sweet, leftover gesture,
our breaths
sucked in,
your fingers suddenly

wrap mine. Oh!

In
the

space
between us,
your hands
carefully sift through
the passions of
my heart.



© 2010 Céce



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You've always had a way with words, to dance us in that chasm that love erases forever. I love the beautiful, lifting way you let us feel alive again in that first touch.

Malagasy Proverb: "Let your love be like the misty rains, coming softly, but flooding the river."

Posted 4 Years Ago


yes...an eloquent piece...such soft strokes of the literary brush...evocative of tender love and gentle heart...lovely write...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Each line breathes elegance.

Has the spirit of haiku, while extending the expressivity.

The visual structure of the poem enhances the breathless sublimity of the content.

Beautiful.

Posted 7 Years Ago


This was very romantic Cece. I really like the way it flowed and the look of it was really cool.

Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

Posted 7 Years Ago


What a moment. Love it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


well thought of..
short and effective..
not a single word wasted..

a great piece..

Posted 7 Years Ago


the first line's syntax seems a little contorted, however I do like the estrangement. The visual caught my eye, and I think it reflected the momentary gesture. It's a very short, intimate act, that expands to the more grand concept of passion. Nice concise landscape.

Posted 7 Years Ago


nice work....

nice thoughts through a very well written poem...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Wow, I feel the intense emotions behind this one! A great write...
"Oh! In the space between us....." what a great use of words....

Posted 7 Years Ago


good luck

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Céce

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