First touch

Edges of your eyes,

soft gathered lashes, I'm

trying not to look

too much.

My finger twitches

(I think you see)

and in a sweet, leftover gesture,

our breaths

sucked in,

your fingers suddenly

wrap mine. Oh!

In

the

space

between us,

your hands

carefully sift through

the passions of

my heart.

Reviews

[Fernando Pessoa]

You've always had a way with words, to dance us in that chasm that love erases forever. I love the beautiful, lifting way you let us feel alive again in that first touch.

Malagasy Proverb: "Let your love be like the misty rains, coming softly, but flooding the river."

[alan peter kelly]

yes...an eloquent piece...such soft strokes of the literary brush...evocative of tender love and gentle heart...lovely write...

[Pax Analog]

Each line breathes elegance.

Has the spirit of haiku, while extending the expressivity.

The visual structure of the poem enhances the breathless sublimity of the content.

Beautiful.

[Kelley]

This was very romantic Cece. I really like the way it flowed and the look of it was really cool.

Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Ramiz Ilham Khan]

What a moment. Love it.

[J.S. Pua]

well thought of..
short and effective..
not a single word wasted..

a great piece..

[Alessander]

the first line's syntax seems a little contorted, however I do like the estrangement. The visual caught my eye, and I think it reflected the momentary gesture. It's a very short, intimate act, that expands to the more grand concept of passion. Nice concise landscape.

[Art]

nice work....

nice thoughts through a very well written poem...

[Buddhistboy73]

Wow, I feel the intense emotions behind this one! A great write...
"Oh! In the space between us....." what a great use of words....

[Mark]

good luck