Lol, so you loved half of it. :P Thanks for the review. To make such a drastic change as cut out two stanzas, I don't feel entirely comfortable doing. But I appreciate your review. And your honest words. Thank you.
Lol, so you loved half of it. :P Thanks for the review. To make such a drastic change as cut out two stanzas, I don't feel entirely comfortable doing. But I appreciate your review. And your honest words. Thank you.
Your criticism was "enjambment." "Run-on" would have worked just fine. But I understand we are here to impress. The problem is not with my stanza breaks. The problem is how you chose to read them.
Why thank you, Gregory Yates, for your review! (Don't know why, but I feel the need to call you by your full name... has a nice ring to it - hee hee) There are a some subjects, like the universe, that make me a bit dizzy if I ponder them for too long. That and the whole raison d'etre thing really get me spinnng. LOL! I appreciate your feedback and thank you for reading.
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