Vince

Posted 16 Years Ago

Thanks for the reviews, though I think you missed a bit. Like the "tanned lips" were the rays of light kissing me, I was trying to make a metaphor for the way it tanned me, like smeared lipstick. I can't remember anything else though.

And I didn't change too much to the story, just some details you'd have to comb through and compare closely to find.

Also, I will consider that exclamation mark at the end of the smoothie poem, though I was just being playful.

Thanks again, and of course, I'll keep checking xanga every few days to see what's new with you. Seriously man, when are you going to publish all of those into a short story collection?

Posted 16 Years Ago

Hey man. Welcome! Good to see you here.