Sarah Takacs

Sarah Takacs

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About Me

I need criticism on pacing and tone; harsh, concrete criticism. I also seem to have forgotten how do write decent dialog--which is what you get when you read fairy-tales and short stories all the time rather than actual novels: a narrative.

I usually don't critique other people unless there's an agreement beforehand as to harshness, and even then I don't do poems. People view poems as this highly personal stuff, more autobiographical than stories, more "feeling" pieces--and get offended if I have anything to say about them regarding rhythm and word choice.

So I'll just put it here in my bio: I will not review your poem. I applaud your bravery at putting pen to paper and letting out pieces of yourself like a modern-day Pandora. I do. But the whole media of poetry seems to be flooded with a sense of self-importance, with histrionics and arbitrary
dropping
of
lines
and a general sense that BECAUSE you wrote it down, it's "deep" rather than the other way around. Maybe I've been ruined for the genre. Maybe I just don't get it. Your poem is probably quite good, honestly--I just won't review it.


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Posted 14 Years Ago


The little sister bit.

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Posted 14 Years Ago


FIXED!

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Posted 14 Years Ago


Thanks for the review Sarah, but I think your problem with the syllables is you pronounce it drunk, I pronounce it drun-K. also I was trying to draw out the please so I guess I should add an ellipses there to signify that. I kinda missed that in my editing process (which is pretty much just go, "Ahhhhh-looks good.")

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Posted 15 Years Ago


Hahaha! We'll help you so that you don't have to show your work to your mom. Will read and comment shortly.

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Posted 15 Years Ago


I feel I've made and a*s of myself by putting an "n" into "published" below...lol

I blame it on my laptop's keyboard and I have no regrets MUHUHAHAHA

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Posted 15 Years Ago


Baaaaaaaah! I love Heinlein. :) What other stuff have you read by him?

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Posted 15 Years Ago


Hey, did someone say "punlished"? I'll have to read your work first (I like Sci-Fi)...Anyway Welcome to Writers' Cafe'!

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Posted 15 Years Ago


I hope you have a good time at Writer's Cafe. We need Science Fiction writers here and I see you've enjoyed the great Heinlein, I look forward to reading what you write!

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Posted 15 Years Ago


Ha Ha! Your profile lies more then mine...It says you live no where. Well if everyone likes your stuff as much as me then you'll probably be published in a day. :)