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I just wrote my first vampire story in form of a poem...he he
And it be cool if anyone could check it out, it's called Daffodil Lament. There are four parts. A little series. It got inspired by the song Daffodil Lament of Cranberries. ::biggrin:: ::tongue::
Here are the links:









They are really cute, will return the favor....thanks ::tongue:: ::smile::


---mim

I could have a good dose of criticism on my piece "Forgotten Flesh". ^^

And for those that have already reviewed it thanks XD I really think I need to hire a full time editor lol....

I have a lot of stuff posted, but the one I'm concentrating on right now are my chapters of They Call Me Death. There is a prologue:


I would appreciate any critiquing of this story. It's basically about the world once it is taken over by shapeshifters sometime in the future. It's not really sci-fi right now, that is I haven't put in much about changes due to it being futuristic. Basically all of the differences are based on humans' perception of shapeshifters in our society. It is narrated by a single character, so we get her take on life in that world.

I would like any input anyone has on the current stories I'm writing, Bite the Hand that Feeds and Revamped.
Thanks all!

I've been working on my story, "A Night In The Park" for about 8 years now! It started out as an idea, and I finally took it and made something out of it. Any feedback would be awesome!
Here's the link:

~Daniella

I am doing a piece called 500 Years

This is the link and I would appireciate any and all feedback:

Well....I am more or less looking to see if Angenii is a book you would think about buying. Basically, is this publishable?

Thanks in advance to anyone reading it.

Chrissie

I think that with some polishing, and dressing up I would definately buy it! You have an awsome plot so far, it's just a matter of working out the little things. So to answer your question, yet I am a loyal fan, and I would buy it. "."

Jocelyn Elizabeth ::biggrin::

YEAH! Well, I am glad I have one loyal reader. ::biggrin::

I am in the middle of sharpening it now. I am going to repost the chapters I have up now with the edits I've made and add chapter five.

I have my fingers crossed that this one is it. I was so close last time, if this one isn't it, then the next one must be. :) Regardless, I am getting close....I hope. It's only been ten years....

Chrissie

Okay I would be mui appreciative if I could get feedback for this since it's my first novel:
Urenit - Chapter 1

Thanks in advance, later.

Laylani,

I couldn't get to Urenit from the link. And when I checked your page I couldn't find Urenit. Do you mind re-posting the link.

Chrissie

I'd love to read your story too, but the link was faulty. Post it again and I will check it out. ::biggrin::

Jocelyn Elizabeth

Huh that's weird, wonder why it didn't work. Ah well, here it is again: