Locomotive Of Life

A poem describing how life is a train journey

Locomotive of Life

Being born arriving at the station

first waking moments a sense of elevation

Learning to walk the first movement along the track

Falling and hurting ones self 

Showing ware your first crack

Told “no” to stupid answers and “yes” to ones which please

the authorities your teachers the lights are these 

Getting older searching adventure a crossroads in your way

you’re a train on its journey the destination your say

Avoid derailments try to stay clean 

find your adventure live for your dream

join me share a journey our tracks parallel and free

no obstacles just two trains the way it will always be

 

Author's Note

I wrote this whilst on a train please give honest reviews

Reviews

[♥Kaitlyn♥]

I like it
Good job!

100/100

[A]

Lovely point of view about life, I liked the subject it's new and not common,
enjoyable poem, well-done.

[trainwreck]

Very clever analogy of life. I've never read one regarding trains, which definately makes this original.

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

good,good!great analogy of the train and the constant transition of life...thanks for sharing!

[jessica Wray]

excellent

[northern monkey]

Like it - lovely lyrical language. Train journeys are a goldmine for creative writing. But don't you think train tracks work better as metaphor for restrictive authorities rather than freedom, and parallel tracks tend to carry trains in opposite directions?

[howlfjdks]

Excellent metaphor for living life.

[Dilan Gray]

I really liked this poem. I loved how you compared life to a train ride. I thought it was really clever! Good job.