Liar,Liar #2

Collab with Burning Demon

Liar,Liar #2

I Looked into you eyes

jaded emerald streaming envy 

The lies I told to you,

the smile you had fallen for 

beneath my eyes so blue,

I constrict your dreams 

scale down your view, 

falling for a love 

wasn’t there to ever pursue,

A single touch can tempt you

bring you to my embrace,

lying to you constantly 

false love you can’t replace,

wish death upon me 

mutual feelings we do share,

the difference between you and I 

I don’t really care,

I never really loved you

I showed my burning star,

my phoenix you wish to be

but your freedom won’t get you far,

you will come crawling back 

your pray to this snakes love,

I’m water to this burning demon 

your angel sent from above,

Again we star in this masquerade 

promises I wont keep, 

fallen again into blacks trap 

the question is how deep?

Author's Note

Read burning demons "Liar,Liar"
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/BurningDemon/683470/
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Reviews

[Color of the Iris]

This was a great follow up to the awesome first "Liar, Liar" both of these pieces were so great that by the first word is accepted through the wall of your mental understanding you are drawn into the environment that the poem displays. Sights, colors, sounds, and emotions become yours and you understand. Now, the final matter would be to decide which one was best... (drum roll) I think the second was best, but the first came only a hair away from taking the sequel's spot. Great job, I loved this one a lot! 100/100!

~ Iris ~

[Rose Masen]

To me, this piece was epic in it's own right. Well done.:)

[♥Kaitlyn♥]

Really good!
I loved reading Liar, Liar and i love this one just as much
:) very good job!

100/100

[Ashley Myers]

wow two different perpectives on a situation i loved it!

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

nice work as always :) I really felt this great read

[guiltyascharged]

Nice, nice. I like it.

[howlfjdks]

Love isn't always true like we believe or wish to believe.

[Sarusai Hiryu]

An opiate-like dependence on one side, a negligent act that is never really love on the other ... nicely portrayed.

[Midday_Mystery]

This was a great Collab. Good job

[Frankie Nguyen]

I like this piece (:

[DVampire]

wow. this is cool. good job ^^