Close and Lean In

Close and Lean In

A Poem by {A}shley {B}lack @-;-
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A completed challenge set by Gwen Goad

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Close and Lean In 


Imagining that first moment 
Our first kiss to be precise
wondering how Its going to feel 
and the method I use to entice
I play it through in my mind 
I need you here to do the rest
but a lovers first kiss is important
I hope to pass this test 

An awkward lean a momentary pause
could change this moment forever
its fine that you would understand
but forget this I will never 

you stand before me a vision of perfection
an angel in disguise
moving towards you feeling anxious
I’m falling within your eyes 

holding you close to my body 
I become weak at the knees
but now time holds no importance
the world around us does freeze 

I close my eyes as do you
and lean in for our kiss
our soft lips touch one another
I’m happy I didn’t miss 
our mouths now slightly open
our tongues come out to play
but gently we do move in motion
our rigorous tongues a roaring ocean 
I brush the hair behind your ear
open one eye slightly just to know you’re here

neither of us want to end 
this true loves first embrace
our first kiss was so magical
your mouth I love to taste
many more will follow
but none quite strong as this
feeling the butterflies the beating hearts
our perfect first kiss

© 2011 {A}shley {B}lack @-;-


Author's Note

{A}shley {B}lack @-;-
I was challenged to imagine a first kiss this is the result

please give honest reviews as always

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There's nothing sweeter than the perfect first kiss but this poem comes quite close. You've captured that moment beautifully.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is such a beautiful poem, I could picture every part of it. Nice work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


This was so sweet, this is like the most perfect first kiss ever. I wish mine had been more like this xD
The poem was so true and just beautiful!

Posted 13 Years Ago


i loved it

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 3 people found this review constructive.

I LOVE IT!!!! You completely pass the challenge! Great poem! I love how I can feel and see everything, this is so perfect! Beautiful poem Ashley! Great job! I couldn't ask for a better poem to meet my challenge! Fantastic!

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is a very beautiful write.
Wonderfully written and expressed.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Sweet, tender and loving. A completely different angle to the Black poems I'm used to. But, if I'm being honest, I enjoyed this one a little more.

Posted 13 Years Ago


So Sweet and Tender.

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Bravo Mr. Black! My Wife still feels the tingle on her cheek after our first date. I am trying hard to remember the rest! When your time happens, it will be better than you imagine, for you are a poet. Poets know love more than most. Excellent poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is utterly beautiful, tender and passionate. There is nothing like that first kiss...you penned this so well...good work...

Posted 13 Years Ago



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{A}shley {B}lack @-;-
{A}shley {B}lack @-;-

Sheriffhales, Shropshire , United Kingdom



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