A Law Student Studies

This is written for a prompt, describe a person in 500 words, be as wordy as you want, and be choosie with the name

 

        The smell of Brazilian nuts and chocolate enveloped the sweet smoke mixed with coy desperation and hesitation, the ever engulfing conversation battled to be heard over the raucous music blaring form the stereo, and the tables were gritty from years of abuse and smoke; all of which added to a list of detailed needs for a cafe worthy of becoming the main hub for Evian Coolies studies.

         Evian, an ambitious law student, lost any joy in his work after his first semester seven years ago. He now came to drab, upbeat cafes, like this one, in hopes of finishing out his schooling and obtaining a high paying job at any law firm once he finished the Bar.

         Evian drank in the nutty coco with some indifference to its warming affects, the shapely ceramic mug, in his hands, created a melting release to the outer layer of ice while the sugar coated caffeine worked to reopen his drooping eyes. Intolerable ramblings provoked him to find headphones while he cracked each of his several books and began his work on evidence.

         Evian was dressed for no occasion other than to fit quaintly behind the dull lighting, which pained the patrons' eyes beyond anything except for assaulting another with booming voices. His faded sweater fit nicely large on his obese scarecrow figure, which complemented his straw like hair.

         People shifted endlessly behind him in efforts to shorten their lives, he himself fell  pray to the same suicidal mind set yet he refused to share his pleasure with another, he waited every time until the children came inside.

         If one found reason to provoke him, he would lean back into his chair with a sense of irritated superiority and silent curiosity. Evian's voice vibrated a low tenor octave dripping with little interest in the feats of others. He rather found it amusing when someone disturbed his impermeable bubble with odd conversations, still the immediate needs of his work called to him like a mother to a late child, and amusing charter quickly turned to irritated curiosity.

         Observing him an outsider would even admit that his appearance of autopilot student made everything but the loans seem fascinating. His books strewn about him in a semi-circle, while three notebooks took in separate inventories. His being stank of inaudible boredom and genius failure, who's mind just a head of the curve was snoozing to today’s lessons.

         Bent over, Evian copies the original creativity of lawyers before his time, on cases whom without Evian would have nothing to study and strive for. He makes peace with the debacles of his life, and instead strives for rich mediocrity of working as a partner in some high rise New York building fifty years from now.

         Struggling to finish his work in progress, he prepares his mocking case for the next day's trial study and works towards his own borrowed goals.

Reviews

[Neha Farooqi]

Clair, I think this is a really convincing and thoughtful sketch for your character. Although I have some problem with the name. It could've been something else that suited his profession more. Like Evian Jenner or Evian Jane. But nonetheless, the character had some sort of conviction that its alive and existent.
Evian seems to be a sad student of law I assume. Maybe, something has never clicked for him and it also seems like he doesn't love his work which could be sad for anybody. He puts it on the table quiet nicely. The colors around him, the coco, his straw colored hair and his general fatigue and pain with odd conversations give the story a very gloomy, but interesting appeal. I think your character can have an awesome background, like a stirring past life. As for his future, if he can somehow learn to love his work or find something worth his time, he could be very happy.
I wish you had told the color of his eyes. That would've made the him very visual.