Grey Area

Lets dine in Limbo.

I'm coming for you.

I can see the silhouette of your figure as it crosses the threshold, 

gleaming in an aura of faded fluorescence. 

You've sinned.

You've saved.

You've lived.

The tally of deeds, God and Devil, chalk in hand; is even on both spectrum's, leaving you in the middle.

Unprecedented, a soul being lost.

No inferno or suffering; Hell cannot hold you.

No illumination or euphoria; Heaven cannot see you.

So I did what I could, never embracing a positive or negative.

I lived, ate, slept, and dreamed; nothing more.

I dare not lie, I dare not help.

I shall leave my soul indifferent, apathetic to the world. 

I am without color and neutral in all aspects. 

I will beat God.

Cheat the cheater.

I will forgo destiny, for a melancholic eternity

...

 You won't be alone

Limbo will hold for us

infinitely

Author's Note

I thought, what if the only person I ever loved, never passed on to a specific plain. Would I turn my back on everything to traverse limbo forever?

Reviews

[Sukriti Suki]

I love this piece...absolutely! I found it very dark, deep and very very interesting.

Few suggestions: In the 1st stanza, I read it as ' You've sinned, You've saved, YOU'VE lived. Also the font change in the end..the light blue one takes the attention and distracts rather than giving more impact, for me.

I truly enjoyed this piece and was taken to different highs.

[T.W. Early]

Very interesting! deep and thought provoking!

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

Very intriging write, I love how it makes one stop and question all they think they know... nicely done.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A trained and elegant piece that speaks to a reader, well done, good read.





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"I am without color and neutral in all aspects. "

i think this is one of the best poems you have ever wrote!
wow!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Very profound and well written.......and that author's note is the kicker..........I think I would turn my back on everything.