Wounds

Written for The Blue Rose Cafe ~ CHAUCERIAN RONDEL contest.

Some wounds take more than time to heal

Emotions entangled are like ice, hard to keep

Tears roll out whenever they melt and seep

 

With these reminiscences of past, I still need to deal

I had been crying and I will be, with relentless urge to weep

Some wounds take more than time to heal

 

The pain of agonizing wounds I still feel

I was delicate back then, so cuts are deep

And this dust like pain time alone can’t sweep

Some wounds take more than time to heal

Author's Note

this was a new experience because of rhyming pattern constraint, hope you like it.

Reviews

[Great Aunt Astri]

Yes, we all have our wounds. It is amazing how we carry on ! I liked your poem, with its original rhyming scheme. Well done.

[Abilash Uttama]

I'm glad you liked it Ma'am :)

[Ana B.]

Nevermind the rhyme constraint, i didn't even notice it, a most wonderful flow ans line as it is :)

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you so much Ma'am :)

[Deepika]

I loved the analogy of emotions to the ice. they tend to accumulate till a saturation point and once it crosses, finds a means to burst out. Good try with rhyme scheme as well! Keep up :)

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you senior :)

[Madhu]

The meaning is very well portrayed! Well written piece :)

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you :)

[Stonz P.]

The theme of wounds taking time to heal is kept throughout.. I'm not a fan of meter or rhyme so will not comment on that..

Although I do feel if you arrange them as couplets, it brings out more impact, IMO.
Good write. Keep writing.

[Abilash Uttama]

Thank you sir, i too was feeling that it could have been more impactful but i had to follow rhyming pattern for contest.

[Stonz P.]

Don't worry about the rules in poetry. It is totally upto you and they are meant to be broken. I, myself, violently oppose rules in poetry and blindly follow them in prose.

And hey don't let the beard fool you. I'm only in my last sem of Engg. ...so no Sirs or anything...haha ;)

[Abilash Uttama]

but you still are senior to me :D

[prajakta]

wow...very well written...:)

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

Hi! I am also a contestant of the contest. This piece is really a magnificent piece of poem. You really are going to give tough competition to me and other contestants of the contest(This is much better then my poem).

This sort of poem is really very tough of rhyming pattern constraint.

Bravo job!

Devanshu

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you so much Devanshu :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

You are welcome and I am also thankful of kind review upon my work.

Devanshu

[nazia]

A lovely work Abhilash. I am still at loss in writing something good for this contest so I would say Good work with the rhyme and the theme too.

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you so much Nazia and i believe you will come up with some good content for this contest :)

[Helena]

I do like it! Very much so. A very worthy addition to the Contest! Thank you so much for joining in.

~ Helena ~

[Abilash Uttama]

Pleasure is mine Ma'am :)

[Helena]

Please call me Helena! :)

There are so many polite young gentlemen in Writers Cafe.....it's very refreshing! Thank you!!

Helena

[Death's Poet]

I actually find the way you did the writing intriguing and I really think It worked well with this poem. very sad but relatable feeling for sure. Beautifully written, as always. Your work is always amazing. Great job as usual :)

[Abilash Uttama]

thank you very much :)