Blind

First Haiku

Your love makes me Blind

Cannot hesitate to Slide

Don't know how to Hide

Author's Note

First haiku - So mistakes will be there. Help me to improve

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You said everything needed in the words. A perfect poem my friend.
Coyote

[Harley Quinn]

The rhythm is catchy. Great work.

[Abraham George]

thanks for commenting.

[Sandipta$]

Wow..
Short but impressive..... Nice to read ur poem....

[Abraham George]

thanks for visiting

[Sofia]

Wow! This is so excellent...a haiku that rhymes...well written...keep writing :)

[Tazeen Ahmed]

This is so beautiful! Encore!
Deep lines...
You nailed it:)

[Abraham George]

happy to know that you liked

[Giulia King]

I like this haiku! I've actually tried to write one for such a long time now, but can't seem to make it good.

[Abraham George]

thanks for the comments

[Anjali]

I really don't know much about haiku but it's really beautiful. Enjoyed it!

[Abraham George]

happy to know that you enjoyed

[APOORVA]

nice.
very very nice, you could add some more emotions to it if you feel like, though it is complete as it is

[Abraham George]

If i add more emotions these lines will be more and then it wont be a Haiku

thanks for the suggestions

[Surya]

As Saher said it would be better....And yeah it is meaningful, perfect with emotions....I liked it..:)

[Abraham George]

thanks for the comments

[Najam Us Saher]

Meaningful and thoughtful....just a suggestion if you change can't to cannot those will be 2 syllables so the second line will be complete and add a 1 syllable word in the first line.....Then it will be a perfect haiku....

[Abraham George]

your suggestions are considered and warm hugs from Olaf

[Najam Us Saher]

There should be no space in cannot....Now it's a perfect haiku...beautifully written....I loved it...

[Abraham George]

space is a mistake