Blind

First Haiku

Your love makes me Blind

Cannot hesitate to Slide

Don't know how to Hide

Author's Note

First haiku - So mistakes will be there. Help me to improve

Reviews

[z.chéri]

This is very good but i believe the order of syllables is 5, 7, 5 not 4, 6, 5. But that was all i picked up! I see that you entered this into my competition and i already marked you as one of the finalist! You are the first submission so there is still competition but who knows! You could be the winner and if not I'm sure there will be many more competitions for you to enter and improve your writing! (the thing i picked out isn't that big of a deal plus there could be more haiku types that i'm unaware of! This is of course still considered a haiku so don't get discouraged!) Love your work! Keep writing! :) x

[Abraham George]

thanks for your valuable suggestions and info

[Joey Nizz]

Short and simple yet powerful.

Good job!

[Abraham George]

thanks bro

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome, keep it up.