Common Uncommons - by Abysmal Savant

Common Uncommons - by Abysmal Savant

A Poem by Abysmal Savant
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Time for the obvious lessons...
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Common knowledge refutes the truth
Common beings rebuke those who call for proof
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Downtrodden and toxic well known to abuse
Debase then let loose we spread hate and confuse
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We approach to produce but then sculpt our own noose
In a cult we're a group that results in a coup
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Common answers need questioned...
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We are constant contradictions to ourselves and to our health
We conform to no restrictions so with conscience we're in hell
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In a quadrant with a garment we can fancy to ourselves
We can fashion satisfaction and then hang there by the belt
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In our congress there's a sonnet of allotment and we've knelt
Then as we felt it overwhelm, our grasp had fell far from the helm 
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Slumberous convalescents... 

© 2011 Abysmal Savant


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You have an excellent sense of rhythm. Each sentence can be broken down into about four parts and dashed off the tip of the tongue. It's actually quite fun to read-- just to play with the syllables and rhyme.
Though, there is one set of lines that twisted my tongue back a bit
"In our congress there's a sonnet of allotment and we knelt/As we felt it overwhelm our grasp had fell far from the helm"
With the rhyme of the rest of the poem I still cannot speak this line correctly. The grasp keeps becoming the part that was overwhelmed, not the part that had fallen far from the helm. A spot of revision and you'll be golden.
Once again, beautiful rhythm. Keep it up.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I like how each sentence is able to be broken down into parts and its interesting to read. Nice rhyming, overall beautiful write GREAT JOB!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


You have an excellent sense of rhythm. Each sentence can be broken down into about four parts and dashed off the tip of the tongue. It's actually quite fun to read-- just to play with the syllables and rhyme.
Though, there is one set of lines that twisted my tongue back a bit
"In our congress there's a sonnet of allotment and we knelt/As we felt it overwhelm our grasp had fell far from the helm"
With the rhyme of the rest of the poem I still cannot speak this line correctly. The grasp keeps becoming the part that was overwhelmed, not the part that had fallen far from the helm. A spot of revision and you'll be golden.
Once again, beautiful rhythm. Keep it up.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on September 14, 2011
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Tags: lies, truth, government, rebellion, politics